This has some influence from the Warlock movies..

Lord of Fear

Lord of darkness
show me thy way
Where danger and evil lurk
in moments of spirits of dread and dark
come to play

Spreading fear and making things disappear
Controlling the mind
profound ruler in time..

(chorus)
Lord of Fear
Master in Disguise
Depriving the wise
Lord of Fear
Your final days are here..

Suffering caused by desire
Desire caused by incompetence
Incompetence caused by fear
a creative new ritual is very near..

Repeat Chorus

The seance has begun
Cruel intentions seem to be fun
In death , we have won
Spirits of the elder gods
Stand before our evil son..

Repeat Chorus..

End..

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There was a few spots I wasn't getting a good flow to. All in all it wasn't bad though.

In the first verse I couldn't tell where one sentence or thought began or ended so that was confusing.
The next thing part about making things disappear. No, not in a song like this. I half expected David Copperfield to materialize to poof something away. Not a good inmage for a piece like this. If you just have this it sounds fine , keeps with the tone and doesn't weaken it.
Spreading fear
Controlling the mind
profound ruler in time.
Next part is in the chorus and it's meerly a question. Is it his end , his finality? The last line eludes to him being now more.

The next verse is cool. I liked that.

The seance has begun
Cruel intentions seem to be fun (cringe, ahh , nooo !! )
Cruel intentions, damning done-- maybe ?
In death , we have won
Spirits of the elder gods
Stand before our evil son..

Fun just doesn't work here either. I just was mentioning forced rhymes at my forum and that I didn't think there was such a thing. You make me eat my words !!! Woe is me !

But all in all, it wasn't bad. And that's what we're here for is to strive for perfection in our pieces. What are your thoughts on the changes I made? I hope I didn't change your meaning. I don't like to do that.

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Interesting thoughts there LBxxx. I've wrote a bunch of tunes where I had good ideas, and was in a hurry to write them,etc. I appreciate your comments and thoughts on this. You can tell I didn't put as much effort into the tune like I should of,etc. But anyways, I'm glad you like the tune /idea and such.
Thanks...

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THY!!! AHAHAHAHAHEHEHEH

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