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Old 2004-01-08, 16:27
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Left For Dead

here is a grind song i made up a while ago.

"Left For Dead"

all i know,
is how to kill,
my urge to,
let the blood spill,
to fulfill my every desire,
i wrap you in barb wire,

split your,
fucking head,
smashed on,
the fucking ground,
lay without a sound,
your crying now,
mangled, and left for dead,

curse you,
curse you,
bleeding from your eyes,

snap your,
fucking neck,
smashed in,
your fucking face,
murdered, without a trace,
covered with mud and dirt,
mangled and left to suffer,

curse you,
curse you,
bleeding from your eyes,
curse you,
curse you,
i wish you would die,
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Old 2004-01-08, 16:52
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Meh, the rhyme in it is a bit boring, especially the first verse.

the rest is kinda okay, but its not really my thing 'the kill kill kill I'll fucking kill kill bla bla' story

but well, for grind this could probably work out just fine!
 
Old 2004-01-09, 02:04
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it was very basic, but if thats what you were going for, it worked, id be more graphic on the violence and gore, use bigger words, and better ryhming would help alot as well, go idea, though
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