2004-01-08, 16:27
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Join Date: Aug 2003
Location: Earth v.6.9
Posts: 355
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Left For Dead
here is a grind song i made up a while ago.
"Left For Dead"
all i know,
is how to kill,
my urge to,
let the blood spill,
to fulfill my every desire,
i wrap you in barb wire,
split your,
fucking head,
smashed on,
the fucking ground,
lay without a sound,
your crying now,
mangled, and left for dead,
curse you,
curse you,
bleeding from your eyes,
snap your,
fucking neck,
smashed in,
your fucking face,
murdered, without a trace,
covered with mud and dirt,
mangled and left to suffer,
curse you,
curse you,
bleeding from your eyes,
curse you,
curse you,
i wish you would die,
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2004-01-08, 16:52
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Master Killer
Alumni Staff
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Join Date: Feb 2002
Location: Utrecht, The Netherlands
Posts: 11,372
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Meh, the rhyme in it is a bit boring, especially the first verse.
the rest is kinda okay, but its not really my thing 'the kill kill kill I'll fucking kill kill bla bla' story
but well, for grind this could probably work out just fine!
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2004-01-09, 02:04
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Lo, they do call to me...
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Join Date: Aug 2003
Location: virginia beach, VA
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it was very basic, but if thats what you were going for, it worked, id be more graphic on the violence and gore, use bigger words, and better ryhming would help alot as well, go idea, though
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