Lost in fire, lost in death
there it lays... a corpse of the white messiah burning within the lusting fires of ice... waiting to the blade descending lost in time,
waiting for death

Sathan! take my soul, the soul of your servant,with pride I lay in wait for the apocalypse patiently, while others shall suffer I will serve with honor...

NEPHASTOPHELES! grant me the power!

The one who knows no fear screams at the gates of the dark temple of the black ice, beyond the realms of black death....

Sitting at the side of sathan, waiting for the come of the progenies of death... writing the fate of every soul...with the hate of the pure evil

Gathered, the horsemen storm the land, as the sound of death ablaze my sorrow.....

and...when everything appeared to be lost, silence appeared... as slowly... the cold wind takes my soul softly.... as I softly cry...as I lay dead on the fire... becoming into ashes..... ne'er to live again......

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It sounds more a monologue to be read to a background music to me. It has some good imagery to it, but it seems to lack something to really bring it out. Maybe some Morbid Angel type music would make it seem more melodic and dramatic, but the end just in reading it seems a little blah. I think that's strictly from just being read though.

And if you aren't familiar with my critiquing habits, no matter what someone else writes , I try to look at it from the artist's perspective and not judge by my own beliefs. I wouldn't bash a song for it's message. I think it's EXTREMELY important that intelligence and empathy are used in writing and responding although certain subjects of inhumanity do make me cringe. This isn't one of those though.

Not a bad job !

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well... thanks for answering... i guess.....

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