Im gonna get my ass sewed for using the name of this song from a guide and movie, about H.P. Lovecraft films, and films based on H.P. Lovecrafts stuff. Its kinda old metal sounding, kinda like a Venom song i heard "buried alive" slow and simple, but creepy.


The Lurker in The Lobby

In the back of your mind
Or in the back of your car
Not a sound has crept
But the creature is not far

Just a block away
from the theatre screens
Not even the Horn
Will muffle your screams

Fine line between imagination
And reality
The man in the crimson glow
Reminds you of mortality

He'll tap on your shoulder
When your house is so near
Just a sign of pressence
Enough to strike you with fear

Hes the one to fear
The one that kills as a hobby
No one can escape
The lurker in the lobby

When you look in the mirror
And there stands a dark figure
You turn and gasp at
The lurker in the lobby

No man has ever drempt
No woman has revealed
Theres a man stareing back at us
Out afar in the feild

With Glowing eyes
He gets closer every second
You dont know what it is
As he strikes at that moment

MUAH HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA
AHHHH HA HA HAH A HA HA HA HA HA HA

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The way you use the settings I don't like. Like you speak of the car...the horn, then your house, a mirror, all the while...are you still a block away??
I think you should stay with one of those, especially the mirror and the dreams. That way it's like a window into your madness and fear........

And the laugh was too much.

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Ohhhhh boy..not this again man. Its just simple stupid and sapposed to be creepy.No spacific place at the same time....Just some spooky corny shit.. Do you read the top or just skip right to the song? just askin, usually you need to read the top with my shit, heh i dont know......I didnt want to use metaphors or what ever about the "window madness" or what you said...........Its just plain simple corny old school type of shit...


Thanks for your opinion.

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I'd say it qualifies 2 points less than good, verdict: alright

1. Sounds like Venom, yes, but I didn't necessesarily (that doesn't look right...) like the view point of the story being an 'overall, these are the place he will get you' approach

2. You could have done that approach in the first two verses maybe and then the following verses could go into specific locations and then elaborate from there

Overall 6/10

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