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Old 2003-07-27, 12:44
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Lightbulb ok......better version of dental torture

heres a few adjustments i made to dental torture, let me know what u think

DENTAL TORTURE.

In you are dragged, kicking, screaming.
Light source oscillates, insects on the floor,
Coerced in the chair, tools are prepared.
Clamp rammed into your mouth, open wide.

Scalpel revealed, the insane pain is on its way.
Around your teeth it slices, lacerated gums.
Hammer to the front, hammer to the side.
Enough to alleviate, all your teeth inside.

The pliers are unmasked, the drill is powered up.
Your tooth the tool clamps, pulling and contorting,
Striving to pull it from your mouth, the drill severs the source.
Hacking at clinging tissue, the mouths interior hangs out.

Must keep you animated, delay your passing out.
Emit salt in the wound, swept away by iodine,
Red hot knife singes the apex, immense bleeding pauses,
The scalpel reappears, only thirty one more to go.
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..............................................................................That night he drove to the graveyard and dug up her lifeless body, he then eagerly returned home, positioned the corpse in his bed, and after almost forty years of celibacy, thusly began his first intimate aquantence with the feamale gender. Gein found the corpse so sexually stimulating that he ended up eating parts of the body, and making a waistecoat of the skin, so he could wear it and become a woman whenever he wanted to .......................................................................................... ..........
 
Old 2003-07-27, 15:35
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eh, better.
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Old 2003-07-28, 03:18
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Thats not like at my dentists office, i get to watch cartoons and have a toy when its over haha jk
 
Old 2003-07-28, 22:09
Straker
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My dentists influanced that song..........
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..............................................................................That night he drove to the graveyard and dug up her lifeless body, he then eagerly returned home, positioned the corpse in his bed, and after almost forty years of celibacy, thusly began his first intimate aquantence with the feamale gender. Gein found the corpse so sexually stimulating that he ended up eating parts of the body, and making a waistecoat of the skin, so he could wear it and become a woman whenever he wanted to .......................................................................................... ..........
 
Old 2003-07-29, 06:42
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It's okay. I liked the last verse the best, still.


And, you got toys?! I only got stickers. I wanted a rainbow sticker so I could see my Dad put it on his friend's car at the prison. Heh. Kidding.

Last edited by killingismybiz : 2003-07-29 at 07:09.
 
Old 2003-08-02, 01:09
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That gave me the willies............nice job? Good imagery?? I felt every bit of that ??

It was really great. ANd I'm a really sick person.
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Old 2003-08-02, 05:55
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I previously made the comment that it sounds like Mortician in which I still think it does. I'm not saying the writing is bad, it's good stuff, I just see this song as, I guess, death metal satire, but written more maturely than Mortician would.

Good stuff, odd subject.
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