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2003-06-30, 22:04
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"Plea" -thx 4 rdn
A few people have read this and liked it so I thought I'd throw it your way and see what you think. I'm pleased with the meter of it. And I think it would be highly adaptable to music although I haven't worked on that yet. Thanks for the read.
"Plea"
Possess me.
Don't let me stray
Keep me trapped inside your flame.
Fuel the fire burning bright-
And hold me close
All through the night.
Don't let me stay in guarded care.
Hold me tightly with just your stare.
Uncomforting but so sublime.
Mezmorize me for all of time.
Take these golden strands so fair.
Lift my face.
Make me aware-
Of the passion's rise, and claim
All of me when you speak my name.
Earthly longing, burning fire.
Raging torment , one desire.
Wanting more and more each day.
I beg you , never leave me-
Stay.
BJH
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Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
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2003-07-01, 08:41
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i cant help it, but i really like it. One of your best without a doubt  |
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2003-08-07, 07:03
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good stuff to read, your emo type songs always get me thinking
Great stuff
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2003-08-09, 21:34
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Thanks , that's cool . Glad you liked it.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2003-08-10, 06:07
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I am a tax on the world..
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sounds like Gone with the Wind...
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This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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2003-08-10, 08:18
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Really?? The movie?? I never made that connection. That's interesting though.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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