In the forest he walks, surrounded.
By the most beautiful creatures of
his kind. Little nymphs and dryads
swirl around him as he strolls without
haste towards the Glade.
Birds sing and the moon is full. The
time for seizure is now.

But an evil undertone takes up with
the birds voices. An angry humming
that soon transforms into a piercing
vail. The man stops and the creatures
vanish as if they never existed.

The vail stops.
The man looks around.
The moon is not visible under the
heavy boughs of eternal trees.
He frowns and strains his ears to
catch any sound. But there is none.
The forest is silent, soundless.

He again starts to walk towards
the Glade, when suddenly his world
is filled with sounds and colors and
pain. Thousands of tortured beasts
burst out of nothingness to assail this
lonely figure in black ominous forest.
He fights but cannot prevail against
the attack of swarming, relentless beast.

All is black. No sounds are heard.
Then the cloud moves away from the
moon. Lonely figure can be seen
walking leisurely towards the forest.
A forest where the Glade is. The nightbirds
sing and the man is gladdened. He is on
his way to seizure.

The dryads gather around the man and
begin to swirl around him. The man is
lulled by their blur motion and begins
to smile. This will be a good cleansing.
And again the forest falls silent.
And for a moment you can hear a cry
of such unbearable loss and suffering.

The man who even now walks toward the
forest wonders if that could be. No it is
the forest where the Glade is. It is a place
of joy and happiness. No evil can penetrate
its holy boundaries.
And the dryads greet the man just before
he walks into the forest.

The man fails to see that bright red blood
is covering their hands, for he is on his way
to the Glade.

Pretty good work!

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if i knew what a glade was.........

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glade = lawn

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wow!
it all makes sense
now i can honestly say its good!

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dude, youre from finland!! go check ou tmy haiku at the haiku thread!!
yeah... its good... sounds something like shakespeare to me...

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i cant critic this as song lyrics, all i see are sentences/a story shapped like song verses, with no structure or anything, so i cant imagine it going with music because it just wont fit.

but i give A+ to the content, although, the style is not exactly appreciated around here =/ neither will you receive a good critic of any sort because there arn't exactly good or intelligable writers on these forums.

but anyway, the content KICKS ASS. i love it sheerly because this is my type of thing...but that's all i can give on it.