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"Dusk Over Me"-- thx 4 readin'

2003-05-21, 23:31

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"Dusk Over Me"-- thx 4 readin'

Just a short little piece of imagery. Comments appreciated.

"Dusk Over Me "

A sunset feeling penetrates
Dormant recesses
Covered by a slowly moving
Blanket of nightfall.

Under the canopy of blackness,
There's not a planet in sight to gaze on,
Not a star to wish upon.
The only glimmer far away -
Almost hidden from sight.
Shadowless.
Breathless.
Vaporous.

BJH

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2003-05-22, 18:52

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the first stanza is cool.

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2003-05-23, 03:04

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I'll agree. This was good, BUT...

Haha. Kidding.

Personally, I think this is one of the better poetry/songs I've seen on this forum. I'll add two similies to emphasize what I've just said.

2003-05-25, 07:21

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Oooo!! Thanks, guys !!

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