BEHIND THE WALL OF FREEDOM - conceptual album

This is a conceptual album contains of 10 songs.
These lyrics are concept fantasy story with real elements from history.
I will post one song lyrics per day and at the end I will post synopsis.

BEHIND THE WALL OF FREEDOM

Side A: Before
01. Childhood in Innocence
02. Careless
03. Open My Eyes
04. Decision (Partners in Crime)
05. Escape

Side B: Behind
06. Tears for a Dead
07. Brave New World
08. Instant Clarity (Open My Eyes part II.)
09. Return
10. Where Freedom Lies

I was born in this country
Raised in blocks of concrete
Spent days outside with my
Friends and lots of fun

No big problems at school
As I kept right their rules
Did my homework and then
Played games in the sun

Chorus:
Those were the days of my life
Blood in my veins boiling wild
Pain changing fast into smile
No doubt and fear in my mind

Lived every second at full
Everyday was something new
Didn´t care for future
There was just here and now

Learnt to know what is right
Without wondering why
Took everything as it was
Natural somehow

Chorus:
Those were the days of my life
Blood in my veins boiling wild
Pain changing fast into smile
No doubt and fear in my mind
For everything there was a sense
In my childhood in innocence

Chorus:
Those were the days of my life
Blood in my veins boiling wild
Pain changing fast into smile
No doubt and fear in my mind
For everything there was a sense
In my childhood in innocence

In my childhood…in innocence… in innocence…in…innocence!!!

Sounds good so far. Nice flow and not really any changes.

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Thank you.

How I envy you my younger me
You´re living your life…without misery
Misery of knowledge waiting for
Your brain to attack…and start an endless war

How I envy you my younger me
You´re using your mind…just for fantasy
Wild wind in your hair sun in the sky
Friends and games to play…all you needed that time

PreChorus:
Without questions…there are no answers
Where is no why…there´s no because
Without doubts…there are no reasons
With your mind free…you´re not lost

Chorus:
Careless you were
Careless you were
- careless in your mind
- careless in your soul
Careless you were
Careless you were
- careless in your smile
- and your eyes show

How I envy you my younger me
Living in your small world…so easy and free
In your taintless mind there was no mess
´till your conscience is…put to the daily tests

PreChorus:
Without questions…there are no answers
Where is no why…there´s no because
Without doubts…there are no reasons
With your mind free…you´re not lost

Chorus:
Careless you were
Careless you were
- careless in your mind
- careless in your soul
Careless you were
Careless you were
- careless in your smile
- and your eyes show

Careless you were
Careless you were
Careless you were
Careless you were

The only nit I could find was in the line "´till your conscience be…put to the daily tests." I'm assuming there's a pause after the "be" before continuing the next phrase, but it doesn't sound right. Even if you added another word after that, I don't think "be" would fit. If you changed it to "is" there, it would not only sound better, but it would fall into the phrase after the pause better. Just thoughts.
This piece had a great natural rhythm going in it, and seems to introduce a new phase in the story.

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Yeah. You´re right "..." means pause
Alright I´ll change "be" to "is"

Thank you for your advice.

Sitting in my
Best friend John´s room
Waiting what´s to be

„Show you something
That will blow you (away)“
He says smiling at me

Put a cassette
To a player
Second he´s waiting

„It´s from a place
Behind the wall“
He is whispering

And then…push a button…called play
And it´s playing
And it´s screaming…beating to my mind
And it´s yelling
And it´s soaring…black wind fast and wild

What is this I like it?
I´ve never heard before
It´s moving with my body
Invading to my core

PreChorus:
With botton play
He changed my way
Feel something strange
Never be the same!

Chorus:
He´s opened my eyes…clear a haze of tomorrow
New horizons drawing near
He´s opened my eyes…light up my shadows
I´m feeling the end is here
He´s opened my eyes…taking my shadows
Shadows that covering me
He´s opened my eyes…voices to follow
Calling that I´m not free

Something in this music
Lyrics and melodies
Has started something in me
Is it life what it seems?

PreChorus:
With button play
He changed my way
Feel I was tamed
Never be the same!

Chorus:
He´s opened my eyes…clear a haze of tomorrow
New horizons drawing near
He´s opened my eyes…light up my shadows
I´m feeling the end is here
He´s opened my eyes…taking my shadows
Shadows that covering me
He´s opened my eyes…voices to follow
Calling that I´m not free

„Listen to me John´s whispering
This cassette is just a little piece
From the place behind the wall…wall
One day I will get there
Because I want to know more…to know more
Swear you don´t tell it anybody
It´s just between you and me
Think about it if you want more…want more
Because oneday you can go with me“

You can go with me
You can go with me
You can go with me
You can go with me…behind the wall
You can go with me…behind the wall
You can go with me…if you want more
You can go with me…behind the wall…recall in my ears
You can go with me…behind the wall…like a distant dream
You can go with me…if you want more…echoes in my ears
You can go with me…behind the wall…that could be real
You can go with me
You can go with me
You can go with me
You can go with me
You can go with me

Wake up sweating again
Like almost every sleepless night
„You can go with me“ (behind the wall)
Returning echoes in my mind

It has been four long years
Since he pushed the button play
Adulting now I am
Leaving my small world everyday

PreChorus:
Oh John what have you done to me?!

Chorus:
I want to know more than
Will ever find in my land
Keep on fighting my fear
Crime of treason…they call it here

Hearing music I see
What I have never seen before
More facts day by day
I´m just a puppet in someone´s show

PreChorus:
Oh John why have you chosen me?!

Chorus:
I want to go behind
The wall where freedom lies
Raise up my voice of heart
But make a decision…is so hard
Decision to be…partners in crime

My mind is breaking out
In a storm of knowledge and the other questions
the other questions
the other questions!!!

Is it truth what we learn in school
About our history?
Is it truth we can speak fearless
In freedom and liberty?
Is it truth we´re not just a flock
Of the same obeying sheep?
Is it truth that the wall´s been built
To protect not to keep?

No it´s not…now I know
No it´s not…truth´s been shown
No it´s not…truth has died
No it´s not…we used to lies

PreChorus:
Oh John thank you for chosing me

Chorus:
Yes I will go behind
I have made up my mind
With John heading for a fate
My decision…has been made…now
Decision to be…partners in crime

Before my eyes I see it like
It´s happening again
Secret gather of chosen ones
Preparing for a plan

„Exactly in a month since now
Meeting at one a.m.
Behind abandoned watch tower
Everybody undestand?“

Now I´m standing here with a fear in the dark
With my friend John and the other two guys
Who John´s contacted to take us behind
No returning back now we´re on the run

PreChorus:
Towards to our destination
Take it at all costs
Heading for a new horizons
Freedom for us all

Chorus:
We´re on the run…escape…escape
We´re on the run
We´re on the run…escape…escape
We´re on the run

This area around the wall
Isn´t watched in this time
Of a new year celebration
Drunken voices from a far

PreChorus:
Towards to our destination
Take it at all costs
Heading for a new horizons
Freedom for us all

Chorus:
We´re on the run…escape…escape
We´re on the run
We´re on the run…escape…escape
We´re on the run

We´re almost on the other side
John´s climbing as the last
Everything is going on as plan
Until I hear shot!

…

John has fallen and now he´s lying
Blood rose on his shirt
Down on my knees his hand I´m taking
Clearing it from a dirt

„John I´m not gonna leave you here
Come on on my back“
„Don´t be a fool man I´m too heavy
Finish our escape!“
„Because everyone who makes even
Slight crack in the wall
Brings a little piece of freedom
Freedom to us all…so run!...run!!!

Oh no
Oh noo
John no
Oh noo
John no
Oh nooo

Farewell John…Farewell

The last 3 pieces you posted together have a few parts that stumble. Maybe if you read them a little slower or say they out loud you'll see what needs fixed since the other pieces didn't seem to have as many nits.

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Could you be more specific. Do you mean grammar or melody flow?
If you mean melody flow. These lyrics are more progressive so some melodies are more complicated.

The first ray…of a new dawn
In the land of the free
Is bringing…sorrow instead
Of hapiness to me
My best friend John has died…few hours ago

Growing up…together
Since school where we´ve met
We have been…like brothers
In good times and bad
It´s been his dream to go…behind the wall

PreChorus:
The hand of fate is strange…so strange
Yes I should be…in his place
Yes I should be

Chorus:
Tears for a Dead Friend
The best friend of mine
Tears for pity him
For our dream he died
Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead

Has it been…worth indeed
The highest price in life?
I know what…John would tell
It has the reason´s why
To bring a little piece…of freedom to us all

PreChorus:
The hand of fate is strange…so strange
Yes I should be…in his place
Yes I should be

Chorus:
Tears for a Dead Friend
The best friend of mine
Tears for pity him
For our dream he died
Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead

Chorus:
Tears for a Dead Friend
In free land he died
Tears for his memory
He´s now my guiding light
Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead…Tears for a Dead
Tears for a Dead
Tears for a Dead

… he´s now my guiding light

I am coming to big city
Shining through the night
Feeling vibrations so pretty
Hypnotized by the lights

Brand new cars of all famous marks
Are passing me by
Clear sidewalks and trees in green parks
It must be paradise

PreChorus:
I am in the land of the free
See what I have seen in my dreams
Happiness and joy now I feel
In a brave new world

Chorus:
Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

No more words
No more words
can´t describe what I see

Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

Before music shop I´m staring
My eyes open wide
Forbidden albums in my country
Here fearless I can buy

Everything is reconstructed
No debris in sight
So people may be free-hearted
I see facts all around

PreChorus:
In the land of the free I stand
Yes my dreams have come true at last
Future lies only in my hands
In a brave new world

Chorus:
Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

No more words
No more words
can´t describe what I feel

Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

PreChorus:
In the land of the free I stand
Yes my dreams have come true at last
Future lies only in my hands
In a brave new world

Chorus:
Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

No more words
No more words
can´t describe what I see

No more words
No more words
can´t describe what I feel

Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

Brave New world
Brave New world
can´t describe what I see
It´s a Brave New world

Brave New world
Brave New world
can´t describe what I feel
It´s a Brave New world
Brave New world
Brave New world
It´s a Brave New world

Sitting…in a smoky bar
Right now… is celebration time
Today…it has been six months
Since I´ve…come here for a new life

Immigration…office helped me
With many things to my new start
Living in two…rooms appartment
And I´m working at a food store

Chorus:
In the land of occasions
Hardworking man can reach his aims
And fortune favours the best
Hold to my destinations
Step by step I am on my way
To get to the top at last

Drinking…another cold beer
Oh John…how I wish you were here
With me…to live in liberty
Help me…with my new destiny

I feel something…wrong around me
Day by day I realize
Nothing is what…it seems to be
Pink (coloured) glasses falling from my eyes

Chorus:
In the land of delusion
No matter of ability
Corruption and money rule
Believing in illusions
Now I am starting to see
Something here is rotten too

So bittersweet is a taste
Of freedom in this state
For money that godlike
People break human rights

Mrs Justice is a blind
Paper money on her eyes
She judges right for those
Whose alibies are gold

Now it really seems to me
They have the same enemy
Like we have in my country
Just in a different disguise

Enemy is dictating
How to live, what to think
What to buy, what to eat
In their submitted lives

In contract to my land
They have options to change
But they don´t really care…overrulled by laziness
And they will never dare…upon them fear reigns
No!
They will never dare
No!
White flags everywhere
No!

No!
Anymore!
I´m not watching
Now I see!!!

I´ve opened my eyes…clear a haze of illusions
Nothing is really what it seems
I´ve opened my eyes…grab a mask of delusion
That was told in our stories
I´ve opened my eyes…see a reign of corruption
Ruling with power of money
I´ve opened my eyes…see through all illusions
In a state of instant clarity

Sitting…in the empty bar
I know…I will never come
Back home…to see my family
Tell them…for all troubles…I´m so sorry

Radio broadcast:
„Today on the sixth of August 1989
Will be festively put one brick out of the wall
The wall that has been dividing
One nation into two enemy camps
For almost thirty years…!“

I can´t believe in my eyes
Staring at a gathering
Now before the wall so high
People crying and screaming

Hear can´t believe in my ears
It´s a rising of sanity
Fear suddenly dissapears
Freedom´s again at liberty

PreChorus:
I raise my head with expactions
As all people around me
Some of them have given up hope
After neverending years

Chorus:
The wall will be no more
Bricks falling one by one
What I thought would never come
Now it´s happening right here…before my eyes

I wish you were by my side
Oh John why can´t you be here
To see the wall is trembling
The wall that didn´t let you live

How many lives took ´till now
Goddamn wall built by man´s hand
Now it´s the final countdown
They didn´t die in vain John said

PreChorus:
„Because everyone who made even
Slight crack in the goddamn wall
Brough a little piece of freedom
Freedom to us all“

Chorus:
Now I´m coming home
The wall is falling down
What I thought would never come
Now I´m smiling with big tears…in my eyes

Chorus:
Now I´m coming home
The wall is falling down
Freedom has come for all
Now I´m smiling with big tears…in my eyes

I´m coming back
I will return
And I´ll carry a torch of freedom that I´ll burn
Here is the fire
Here is the force
For everyone to make a freedom take its course

John I´m standing here
At your grave at last
It´s after almost one year
Since you have died…died in my arms

Question in my head
Will never leave me be
If we´ve waited just one year
You could have lived…just one more year
You could have lived

Chorus:
To get to the promised land
Where Freedom lies
Behind the wall to dreamland
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies

John I have been there
At place behind the wall
Nothing is like in our dreams
I´ve seen it all…behind curtain call
I´ve seen it all

Chorus:
In the land we did long for
Where Freedom lies
Behind the wall we all thought
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies

Before the wall prisoners live
They´ve got no rights to take
Control of their own destiny
Under opressing reign of state

Behind the wall free lazy live
They´ve given rights to take
Control of their own destiny
To hidden dictators to reign

Chorus:
So tell me now after all
Where Freedom lies
Behind the wall or before
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies
Where Freedom lies

Before the wall behind the wall
Doesn´t matter a place
I have been there I´ve seen it all
freedom´s dying in disgrace

Forevermore the wall is over
New world will be reborn
East and west putting together
Freedom must live on again

Will we ever find remains of
Freedom in all both sides
Will we make it will we go forth
To find a place where freedom lies
To find a place where freedom lies (where…freedom lies)

…You can go with me…behind the wall
You can go with me…behind the wall
You can go with me…if you want more
You can go with me…behind the wall…

…I want to go behind
The wall where freedom lies…

…Because everyone who makes even
Slight crack in the wall
Brings a little piece of freedom
Freedom to us all…

…So bittersweet is a taste
Of freedom in this state
For money that godlike
People break human rights…

Short storyline:
The story is about me (as a storyteller) and my best friend John. We are living in East Berlin that is cut off from West Berlin by the Berlin wall. We decide to emigrate to West Berlin where we think there is freedom. I make it to West Berlin but my friend John is shot on the Berlin wall. Living in West Berlin I realize that there is no freedom here either and people are controlled by corporations and money. After the fall of the Berlin wall I return to former East Berlin. I wonder whether people achieve to take the best elements from both worlds in rising united country.

Long storyline:
The story is about me (as a storyteller) and my best friend John. We are living in East Berlin that is cut off from West Berlin by the Berlin wall. I am in childhood, living careless and in innocence and so I care only for playing games and having fun.
(songs „Childhood in innocence“ and „Careless“).
One day my friend John plays a cassette of some rock band from West Berlin to me. Albums of the rock band is forbidden in East Berlin and I even don´t know about this sort of music. I like it very much. John tells me he wants to emigrate to West Berlin to listen to this music freely and to live in freedom. Then John offers me to go with him. I love music very much. The music that John has given to me and he´s opened my eyes.
(song „Open my eyes“).
Adulting I´m listening more albums of rock bands and from their lyrics I realize that I live in country where „freedom“ is just a word and lies are told to me. After four years I decide to emigrate, what is considered in my country like „Crime of treason of Democratic republic“. So I and my friend John become partners in crime.
(song „Decision – Partners in crime“)
We emigrate on a new years morning when watch guards are drunk. When John as the last is climbing from the wall he is shot. I want to rescue him but John argues to leave him and run. John dies.
(song „Escape“)
I´m finally in promised land (West Berlin), but my best friend John is dead.
(song „Tears for a Dead“)
I´m coming to a city and I´m overwhelmed by Brave new world and I´m staring at music shop window where are all albums of rock bands that are forbiddden in my country.
(song „Brave new world“)
After six months living in West Berlin I have opened my eyes two times more. I realize that not all things that glitter are gold even in so called „Democracy“. I realize that here another hidden dictators such as corporations and money are ruling. Then I compare my country (where people have no rights to change it) to this country (where people have rights to change it but they are lazy or afraid of losing their jobs).
(song „Instant clarity - Open my eyes part II.)
Finally the Berlin wall falls and I can come back home.
(song „Return“)
After almost one year since my escape I´m standing at my best friend John´s grave and thinking about my blame for John´s death because if we´d waited one more year John have could lived. Then I ask myself „Where freedom lies?“ because I have been in all both worlds and I haven´t found it. I wonder whether people achieve to take the best elements from both worlds in rising united country.
(song „Where freedom lies“)