2011-09-24, 09:11
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Having trouble with a piece
I have three preliminary versions of the same projected song and I can't seem to figure out which feels or flows better. Part of the problem is that significant portions of the song are supposed to have a disjunct and even disorienting feel to them and I'm having a difficult time analyzing my own work.
Just be warned that some of the polytonal passages are a bit strange, and might even feel foreign or uncomfortable, but that's entirely intentional and necessary for the theme of the song.
Thanks for listening.
Version 1
http://www.mediafire.com/?g0d7l72awtda7e8
Version 2
http://www.mediafire.com/?6b7w43eh7e3k87j
Version 3
http://www.mediafire.com/?nyn7tnwlq5exnm8
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2011-09-26, 04:14
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I dig the second one. I can't tell you exactly why, but it felt more natural of a flow.
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2011-09-26, 06:57
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Thanks for the input. The thing I'm having problems with is that I had finished the first version a while back and the bridge (Bars 72-101) used in that first version is something I couldn't fit in anything else I'm working on. The bridge used in the second version (Bars 72-98) was just something I came up with when I couldn't sleep and decided to write it down. When I woke up the next day, I listened to it again and realized it really fit the theme of the song.
This leaves me with three options;
a. ignore that it fits the theme of the song and use it somewhere else (I had, in fact, initially intended to build a song around it).
b. totally discard the original bridge, which wouldn't fit in another piece, and use the new one.
c. find a way to work it into the song later as a second bridge.
All options are troublesome. A. bothers me because that riff fits the piece perfectly. B. bothers me because I worked hard on the original bridge, I couldn't salvage it by using it elsewhere, and because it's rough polytonality and inaccessible weirdness fit the theme of the song. C. is a fine compromise, but I'm worried that people will feel like the song drags on for too long.
I'm leaning toward option c. because it adds room for a nice guitar solo from bars 106-114 and either a drum break or some bass wankery from bars 121-123.
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2011-09-26, 07:31
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Would be glad to give it a listen, but I don't have the software.
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2011-09-26, 18:16
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2011-09-29, 14:34
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Chris Rezendes
This leaves me with three options;
a. ignore that it fits the theme of the song and use it somewhere else (I had, in fact, initially intended to build a song around it).
b. totally discard the original bridge, which wouldn't fit in another piece, and use the new one.
c. find a way to work it into the song later as a second bridge.
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I hate doing it too, but sometimes you have to scrap a good riff simply because it just doesn't fit anywhere.
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