You may or may not like it, im in a metalcore/hardcore band so every now and then i contribute lyrics and this is one of the songs i wrote.

"The Blade"
Knife cutting your skin like needles of guilt
traditions of hating warn on you like a kilt

On special occasions you kill
(BV)like nothings happened before
Living through you is living a thrill
(BV)like nothings happened before

Can't make up your mind
to live or to die
you see me standing there as you drown
with one hand out waving goodbye

(BV)in pain you will die
die with the guilt filling your eyes
(BV)in pain you will die
die with my hand on your thigh

the blade has sunk through

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BV = backing vocals.

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My only gab is about the "warn on you like a kilt". I think you meant to say wore? Otherwise I found it pretty decent and it gave me a laugh about the kilt. Scottish people only wear them on special occasions(right??). Also "Living through you is living a thrill" sounded abit bleah...

Like I said earlier "I found it pretty decent."

I got a chuckle out of the kilt, too. It just didn't seem to fit the serious tone of the rest of the piece to me. Almost a forced rhyme. I'm thinking of maybe a phrase ending with 'hilt' since that's a part of a knife. I don't know if that's any help. The rest of the song was good though.

I thought it was pretty good man, just have to fix it up a bit and make it a bit longer too. Other then that , it's good. Good luck.

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yeah, meant to say wore. Or worn even. Thanks for the remarks. BTW metalmaniac- not much to make longer, hardcore vocals aren't that lengthy.

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