Just mud remained.


I wish for a Grey world.
I wish I never tasted the snow.
For now I cannot turn my head.
The sun is my love!
Snow beautified the landscape but the mud beneath remained
Clouds moved away merely the light of the full moon.
Gave structure to the undefined road.
The sun would hold the answer, but the moon revealed the truth..
The light made me familiar with the beauty.
But again is it's the sun that melted it all to nothing...

This mental nourishment....my drive!


There grew a rose inside.
But only thorns were seen.
Planted in fertile soil.
Could transform into a dream.
Fire reflected in my eyes.
A tiny twinkle's born.

This mental nourishment, my drive.
Seems nothing ever stood to reason.
A transcendent contingency.
Became mine to create.
Unaccustomed first steps.

The red of a petal reveals.
This is me... my dream, my angel.
This is me…. Uncertainties in shapes of dreams.
Resemblance to so many withered.
But it won't alter ...my determination.
I won't let it die untried... again


Well, I don't know about these songs myself, they could probably work in a violent screamo/hardcore combination...

tell me what you think!


Edit : re-posted the second song, accidently posted an older piece (posted that one a while ago, its in lyrics too) - (an unborn dream)

i don't like the first one, maybe because i didn't understand
what you were saying or trying to say...

the second one is better.
except i don't get why you say the fourth line:

Calm outside they would never see
The green leaves fall from the aging tree
blood filthy eyes encage the room
Never to see the day they bloom
A sun not to ever be seen
A dream not to ever touch life
A ray not to ever see light
Unborn, deceased

...is a suggestion.

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I couldn't really get into thje first one either. But the second one I did like a lot. Personally, I wouldn't change it.

very rad my friend, the second one is great. Also, hurry up and get some MP3s up on your website so I can listen to you rock that bass! Heh, my band just wrapped up the recording on our new CD and it'll be out as soon as I get some CD-R's to burn it to (18 songs, 30 minutes of classic comedic music in the styles of fantasy metal, lounge music, funk, ska, much more). Get that stuff up man! haha

Cheers,
xx

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Thanks for the feedback guys, I appreciate it.

I'll PM you when we got mp3's online, xdarkesthourx, send me a copy of that cd man

turns out we're not finished with the CD. We decided today to add some more songs to it. Doing that isn't hard. We're decent enough musicians to come up with a style for a song, write the music, and do the improv vocals in a total time of 30 minutes, but once it's finalized I'll have to check out what that shipping and handling is gonna be like and get it to you.

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ah, that would be cool, but I think it's pretty expensive to send it, ofcourse you can just convert some stuff to mp3, but having the original cd would be cool

we're recording our demo in july/june this year, and it's probably going to be a small cd instead of a demo, so we can sell it on shows and stuff, everybody wants recordings but we just don't have them right now (no mixed one's, only crappy recordings..)

ohyeah, it takes us ages to finish a song, getting it together is no problem, but there are allways things we want to change, but we do end out getting kickass songs that way.

i agree that the first one is a little weird, but the second one is great

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actually, i really liked the first one.

the second one was very good man, more lyrics like dat dude, they go off

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Thanks for the replies guys, I appreciate it.

hope I get some inspiration to come up with some new stuff soon