Here's a new song i recently wrote, you got any questions about it just ask, also it doesn't follow any particular pattern or styles, also i didn't really use proper grammer and i think better words could have ben used in some places so plz fix any problems you see. anyways here it is:

Cosmic Sanity

Through cosmic eras and astral voids
Time is warped as is my mind
Bizzare creatures impossible to avoid
And so to the ways of reality i am blind
Now as i look to the stars above
A vast emptiness is all i see
Enshadowed by the wings of the dying dove
A fragment on the plains of exsitence i have come to be

As i am trying desperatly
To perceive the ways of reality
My mind is clouded by insanity
And i'm forced to live with inconsistency

Now as my mind drifts into these spiral voids
I am trapped within a forest of thoughts
Clawing branches of hate and despair
Decived by humanity's tales of false truths
I see our exsitence, killing and death all it is
Written in the heavens a destiny of pain it seems

As i am trying constantly
To conceive my own destiny
My mind is blind to the wasy of reality
And i am forced to live with this insanity
Until i watse away!!

i must be one good writer cause my lyrics must be making you all think real hard scince you won't post any replies!!

It blows monkeys for nickels.

Cheers,
xx

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Meh, I have to agree, work on the spelling too,

I don't get the cosmical stuff anyways, it's not my kind of lyric.

Yeah, I'm not really into the whole cosmic deal with most lyrics either, but if you like those sorts of lyrics, I recommend you listening to some Vintersorg, if you haven't heard them.

But I read through your song a couple times, and it seems like it'd be cool if put to the right music.

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old mans child: revalation 666-the curse of damnation i think has those
kinds of lyrics.

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I thought it was pretty decent myself. A few spelling corrections, but for what you were writing about it was good.
And I agree that Vintersorg's a cool model. Waly's got good taste though, too. Or maybe you could get a Dream Weaver-Crowbar type sound going. You need to have the lyric be dominant though in my opinion.

I LIKE DEATH LYRICS

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i like morbidly happy lyrics, insane but all so true at the same time, lyrics that make people sad is what i like

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It was kind of good, but....... FIX THE DAMN SPELLING AND PUT MORE HATE INTO IT MAN!!!! Good luck dude and Hail!!!!!

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I don't see the problem with the spelling guys, i mean i didn't use any aposthaphes anywheres so some words may seem spelled wron but thats about it!!

I mean english is my first language so i think i know how to spell!!