"The Dead In The Snow"

**The Snow is getting heavy,
Covering all who has fallen,
On top of the Dead OutWorlders,
and mixing with the human blood,
There skin is starting to Freeze,
and there lips are turning blue,
But there I stand above all thats killed,
all of you, Dead in the Snow,


chorus:
The battle is over, for all I see,
I have survived, this can not be,
I smell the Dead flowing through the breeze,
The Dead in the Snow, is all I can see.**


Ok, I wrote this today in a local Cafe,
Its not finnished for I only wrote one Stanza and the Chorus..

I just want honest, Opinions,
Tell me what you think of it, and if you think its crap then just tell me..
Im not gonna freek or anything, because this is the first song I wrote..

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Sounds like a Rhapsody rip off

Well believe it or not, I havent heard of or listened to "Rhapsody"
So it cant be a Rip off..

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Well there really was some similarity for rhapsody but not enough to make it good.
i´m sorry but i didn´t like that.

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which is good because rhapsody seriously sucks donkey dick.

I don't like snow/winter blackish metal sounding lyrics....

OK let me admitt something,
I am currently reading a fantasy book called MAGICIAN, by Raymond E. Feist.
and so it gave me some ideas for the lyrics..
the type of music that I would like to put to this is something like "My Dying Bride"
and they DONT suck!

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Could some one give me the address of Raphsody's website?
I just wanna look up their Lyrics, and see if they are simular.
If they are Ill change them, but the whole war in the snow bit is staying.

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good call, i agree.............

say no to D&D power metal..................

WEEEEEEEEE RIIIIIIIIIIIIIIDE THEEEEEEEEEEE WIIIIIIIIIIIIND!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Rhapsody is the biggest fucking joke I've ever heard in my life....when you start taking promo pictures in armor, with swords and midgets dressed as elves...you're a joke

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