
2008-09-21, 21:49
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Alienation
Mechanic pulse
Intoxicates the planet
What have you become?
Humanity rationalized to death
Absurdist rationality
This change of seasons is final
We will rust away
Earth will shatter
Our words tear down the sky
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2008-09-23, 15:30
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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I didn't like the rationalized/rationality so close together. I'd change one or the other, but otherwise this is a good, thoughtful read for as brief as it is.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2008-09-24, 19:51
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Post-whore
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maybe you're right about that.Thank you for the feedback! 
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