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this poem is entitled "Police grabbin at my nuts"

2008-04-15, 07:02

SkelatorOfSteel

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this poem is entitled "Police grabbin at my nuts"

Police grabbin' at my nuts
cause i'm a minority they feel it is justified

I did nothing to deserve this nut-grabbing
yet i still stand oppressed by the whiteman

Fuckin' with me cause i'm a teenager
with a little bit of gold and a pager

What kind of world do we live in
where a man can gets hit nuts grabbed by law enforcement

Can't even walk down the street
to get money from my bitches

2008-04-15, 19:09

Requiem

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Horrible.

2008-04-15, 20:23

Me himself

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"Just" in the second line would be the logical word instead of "justified", rhythmically and rhyme wise.

I'd also like to call you out on plagiarizing Ice Cube in the third stanza.

I feel like you wrote this with the specific intention to piss people off in petty ways... not that you actually did or anything.

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2008-04-25, 22:39

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A pager?????? hahahaha

At least law enforcement don't have teeth like squirrels do. Now that's a song.

This just made me laugh. No way on earth it's serious. Good for a giggle.

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2008-04-25, 22:43

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You can try to satirize rap music all you want, but it doesn't change the fact that you're not funny and not good at it.

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2008-07-20, 18:53

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nice...

funny poem. sounds like your town has a bad police force.

Last edited by fiery(arm)pits : 2008-07-21 at 20:27.

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