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new song again what ya think?

2002-11-12, 05:07

MeTaLDrUmFrEaK

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new song again what ya think?

tell me what ya think of lyrics

MY HOLE

When I lay down
I close my eyes
Begin to think
My life is full of lies
Im in a world
Which I can not escape
I feel theres no one
With whom I can relate

Chorus

A light shines
In a small and narrow place
And I know
That this is my eternal place
Cause these chains
Keep me locked up and bound
Until the day
Till the day that I am found

I take a breath
Inhale the sacred alibies
And with this
I pray for God to save my life
Becuase Im shackled
And chained up to the ground
And with these chains
Are the reason I am bound

Chorus

A light shines
In a small and narrow place
And I know
That this is my eternal place
Cause these chains
Keep me locked up and bound
Until the day
Till the day that I am found

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2002-11-12, 05:10

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Please dont just say "New song!" in every entry title. Why not putting the song title there instead?

2002-11-12, 05:25

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They're pretty good, they also flow smoothly.

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2002-11-14, 21:10

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i didnt think it was that good. you rhyme "place" with "place". you should work on that. too repetitive.

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2002-11-16, 00:55

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sounds like one of those things you would say before you go to sleep

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2002-11-16, 23:11

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SOunds like you'r having a Sex change

"My hole"...

Almost as funny as NOFx - My Vagina

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2002-11-17, 11:27

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it's better then the other lyrics you posted but again, it's tooooo damn repetitive.

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