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2007-10-02, 13:36
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Life is pain.
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Your Armour
And I would fight the whole fucking city for you I would fight the world I would blindly defend your every whim From every drunk cheat and crook that life can send You think this is a love song but you're wrong This is about blind devotion This is about unconditional love We've both got fucked up lives and we're part to blame on fucking up each others But what does one expect between a son and a mother I know what you feel and I know what your going through But I want you to live Don't let it kill you We'll make it to the end We will survive and defend The honour of a name We don't need the world This place is a hole Filled with holes in the head And we will watch their lives go by Til every last one is dead Mother mine don't die Keep on keeping on Keep on dancing to lifes heartless song
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2007-10-02, 15:17
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Pretty good man, even though i feel in the begining it needs more clarification that you're talking about son & mother.
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2007-11-04, 01:26
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el oh el.
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2007-11-04, 01:44
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el oh el.
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2007-11-04, 01:05
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Death to all but metal!
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You say "fuck" too much
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"Ja mein little poodle, I will hang you by your nipples in my garage,
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2007-11-17, 10:25
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Pretty good. Stays consistent and solid. My favorite line by far: "Mother mine don't die Keep on keeping on Keep on dancing to lifes heartless song"
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TRANZ? LLOZ.
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Everyone is wrong.
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2007-12-10, 15:56
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he stole keep on keeping on from zeppelin anyway good intentions with the poem but you guys should read more of the classic poetry and maybe take a class before you spurt out your emotions to everyone
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2008-01-09, 18:11
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he stole keep on keeping on from zeppelin
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Infinity, im wondering why you chose to disregard grammar, this time around. it made for a bit of a confusing read. although, the second read was better.
I sort of agree with Pr0az. BUT, personal things such as this, are often best left vague.
Last edited by timedragon : 2008-01-26 at 05:44.
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2008-01-17, 20:53
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Sporadic write? Sounds and looks like it might be. Not bad and even though I don't condone "bad words" in pieces if it's something like this I can overlook it as just emotional punch. I think the piece has a ton of heart in it.
As for "keep on keeping on" thousands used that phrase before LZ ever said it in a song.
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Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
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Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
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