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Old 2002-10-30, 01:28
New Blood
Join Date: Oct 2002
Location: melbourne
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all systems failure. let me no wat u think.

ok heres a song i wrote while watching 2001: a space odyssey.

all systems failure

all systems failure
prepare for the end
technologies entity
mankind obsolete
artifficial intelligence
human malfunction

reign of the machine
fed from an iron hand
total dependancy
devolved through evolution

disconnection is inevitable
automatic fears
leave an automatic
the life of the unit
or the world as we know it

the progression of technology
has brought us to this
to sacrifice the processor
or the existence of man
coexistence impractical

well there you go. i think its alittle average and cliche for this topic but its wat came out when i put pen to paper.
feel free to make comments and maybe give me some tips or help on what i could change? thanks mates
success is revenge
i recomend you churn some
Old 2002-10-30, 02:06
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Join Date: Jul 2002
Posts: 2,931
ground control to major tom...

naw, i like it. sounds like somthing with a death metal feel. i like it tho.
Old 2002-10-30, 07:15
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Master Killer
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Join Date: Feb 2002
Location: Utrecht, The Netherlands
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sounds like lyrics from fear factory, you know, like the 'obsolete' cd.
not my thing really, hehe, it's okay though, except for the last part.
Old 2002-10-30, 11:36
New Blood
Join Date: Oct 2002
Location: melbourne
Posts: 13
yeah i agree very fear factory!
thats wat i ment by saying that it is cliche, it absolutley a fear factory inspired song. i dunno if i like it now.... its ok i guess. i always like something when i write it but a lil bit l8er i hate it....
oh well back to the drawing board i guess.....
gore is so much
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