I suck at lyrics, heres my try.

Dont bash me too bad and try to help with this.

Ice creeps across the land
The frost giants have awoken
We will fall into an age of winter never before seen
Streams, lakes, and rivers will freeze over
Even the great, vast ocean shall become ice
This is the Fimbulwinter

Legions of frozen warriors will destroy all who oppose
Nothing will stand in their way
Cold hate in their hearts
Blades of ice in their chilly hands
SLAY THEM ALL

As night approaches and the stars light up the black sky
The blizzard gets harsher and harsher and the snow gets deeper
Everything will be frozen in time
This is the Fimbulwinter


Its a bit repetitive.

Okay, first off what's the Fimbulwinter. Is that really a word or did you make it up? It makes me giggle. It would make a good name for an Irish wolfhound, too.

Anyways, I think this is a pretty cool idea, but it just needs some structuring so the words fit the idea better.
I think the first thing I'd do is switch the first two lines around. Then in the second part you say they destroy all who oppose, but you don't say what might be the opposition. Could another verse be added to show what you're talking about there?
The first 2 lines are contradictory. There's stars, but a harsh snow that's getting deeper. There has to be clouds to have snow and if there's clouds that heavy you can't see stars.
I'm going to turn it on it's ear and see what you think. If you have a tune for it already my rewrite may not work, but I'll show it to you anyways.

I omitted after destroying so its nonspecific. It goes on to tell how they're doing it and that they're doing it to everything in their path.


As night approaches, stars light up the black sky
Frost giants have awoken
Ice creeps across the land
We will fall into an age of winter never before seen
Streams, lakes, and rivers,
Even the great, vast ocean shall become ice
This is the Fimbulwinter

Legions of frozen warriors destroying
Nothing will stand in their way
Cold hate in their hearts
Blades of ice in their chilly hands
SLAY THEM ALL

The blizzard gets harsher and harsher and the snow gets deeper
Everything will be frozen in time
This is the Fimbulwinter

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The Fimbulwinter is from Norse Myth, but the ice giants dont go and start killing everything. I just added the ice giants.

Im going to add to it eventually.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fimbulwinter

I've fooled with this sort of concept in the past and its remarkably hard to push through.. Keep trying, you write well.

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you know what? wikipedia rocks

i like it, because i love cold, icy winter
i hate miserable summer. it burns me.

edit: oops, i didnt see that you linked wikipedia, at the end.

maybe don't do "we will"

be a bit more creative.

if it was casual it would be OK but since it's epic, you have to say "we will" in a different way. because simplicity in lyricscarries connotations of bands like sayyyyy: the misfits

I would say "we shall"

But i say "Even the great, vast ocean shall become ice"

I dont want to use shall too much.