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2007-03-23, 10:33
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This probably sucks
This is shit so far...actually, I don't think there is any hope for it at all. Just a stupid idea I got whilst visiting Ogrish and doing lines of snuff. What do you think? Don't be too hard on me, I only worked on this for 20 minutes, it's just an idea so far...and not much of an idea. Just looking for some feedback, wondering if I should work on it or just scrap it.
~Thanks
Homocidal Funhouse
Bring the one you hate the most, for I am your depraved host
Make them pay...to their dismay, the torture will start today
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Hear the screams, see the pain, smell the blood, watch it flood
Twisted amusement
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Come to
The homocidal funhouse
(Bridge)
Carnage sought, cadavers rot
Revenge is fun, enemies distraught
Bitch
Hung upside down
In menstrual blood
Watch her drown
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Asshole
Tied and gagged
Human piņata
Bludgeoned and snagged
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Chances are there have been Irish in every corner of the world, no matter how remote. Our semen is listed in the World Health Organisation's Big Book of Pestilential Materials.
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God, the Japanese are so weird. This HAS to be the long term effects of the atom bombs. No one is that weird on purpose.
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The slams in that song always kill me. First time I heard that song I was like "Too much heaviness - brain collapse" but now I could murder my family to that one
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2007-03-23, 11:00
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I think it would be cool lyrics for a band like Mad Sin...
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2007-03-23, 23:14
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Well, I think you could keep parts of it and be a bit more creative. The woman business has been done to death. The guy has, too, but bringing in the pinata made it feel more "funhouse." It's not bad for an outline, but dig it deeper if you think it's worth it. Maybe multiple distorted mirrors in a surgical room where castrations are done or something like that.
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2007-03-24, 00:57
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Well, I think you could keep parts of it and be a bit more creative. The woman business has been done to death. The guy has, too, but bringing in the pinata made it feel more "funhouse." It's not bad for an outline, but dig it deeper if you think it's worth it. Maybe multiple distorted mirrors in a surgical room where castrations are done or something like that.
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Hmm, yeah it does need alot more work, as I did only spend 20 minutes on it. I obviously have the main idea down, I just need to branch out into more detailed ideas...thanks for the suggestions 
~Cheers 
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Chances are there have been Irish in every corner of the world, no matter how remote. Our semen is listed in the World Health Organisation's Big Book of Pestilential Materials.
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God, the Japanese are so weird. This HAS to be the long term effects of the atom bombs. No one is that weird on purpose.
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The slams in that song always kill me. First time I heard that song I was like "Too much heaviness - brain collapse" but now I could murder my family to that one
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2007-03-24, 23:54
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This is shit so far...actually, I don't think there is any hope for it at all. Just a stupid idea I got whilst visiting Ogrish and doing lines of snuff. What do you think? Don't be too hard on me, I only worked on this for 20 minutes, it's just an idea so far...and not much of an idea. Just looking for some feedback, wondering if I should work on it or just scrap it.
~Thanks
Homocidal Funhouse
Bring the one you hate the most, for I am your depraved host
Make them pay...to their dismay, the torture will start today
-
Hear the screams, see the pain, smell the blood, watch it flood
Twisted amusement
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Come to
The homocidal funhouse
(Bridge)
Carnage sought, cadavers rot
Revenge is fun, enemies distraught
Bitch
Hung upside down
In menstrual blood
Watch her drown
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Asshole
Tied and gagged
Human piņata
Bludgeoned and snagged |
good stuff man make it longer
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anything to point out their hypocrisy.
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He's calling you a faggot piece of shit because you are young and unintelligent, and most of all, you are a boring, stereotyopical, close minded metal head. Please don't pretend to understand anything PST says. Please leave the forum now.
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2007-03-25, 12:20
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 Love the centre-aligned presentation.
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