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2007-02-27, 14:24
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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The only thing I could see was a possible interpretation with the word "pissed." Over here in the States that generally means angry. I know you mean drunk as a skunk, but someone that does know that might interpret it differently. The rest of the tone of the piece sounds like a mellow thoughtful drunk and not an angry drunk so I wonder if that word could be an issue. Of course, if one is just singing the words and not getting into the lyric literally then it probably doesn't matter much.
I liked that you made it look like it was another person before you said it was the "me" in the piece.
I thought this had a really good rhythm and all around structure. It could have a hiphop feel to it or go punk or whatever you want. Very versitile.
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