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2007-02-20, 21:33
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Fix
This is the second song. I don't like it too much, but it could turn into a half decent thing. What do you think?
Innocent, sweet, pure female
In modest cloth, proper attire
Weak, frail, ripe, ready
Satisfaction guarenteed
Uncontrollable carnal urge
Erectile desire to be in her
No regard for her body or soul
Just another shot to keep my high
I need my fix
My addiction to pain and pleasure
A yearning for release
An orgasm through brutality
I tore through the fabric so thin
I revealed the forbidden orbs of sin
She quivered and wailed, a waste of time
Is my desire for cruelty such a crime?
Pinned to the ground, the bitch was due
The inevitable penetration, erect with glee
I thrust, harder, faster, with no mercy
Bodily juices pouring out
I need my fix
My addiction to pain and pleasure
A yearning for release
An orgasm through brutality
Blood and semen stain her cunt
Her anal cavity butchered & torn
My seed has been sewn for the day
I'll be eager to return to reap my rewards
No satisfaction felt, fix denied
Need more power, need more pain
Grabbing her hair, I hear a whimper
I stifle the noise as I skullfuck the whore
(guitar solo)
Dead on the ground, covered with my lust
Red, curdling, draining out
The suffering is what gets me off
More is good, but even more is better
Buried, preserved for another day
Innocent no more, dormant in purgatory
To be continued, my precious
Until once more I need my fix
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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2007-02-20, 21:37
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this is the kind of shit that turned me off of CC.
Write something with meaning, no more. SKULLFUCK!!!!cUT oVARIES WITH A RUSTY CHAINSAW!!!!!TITS BLEEDING!!!MAGGOTS CRAWLING OUT OF YOUR DICK!!! FUCK YEAH!!!!
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are you telling us that you have 4 boobs...2 small and 2 bigs
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2007-02-20, 21:39
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this is the kind of shit that turned me off of CC.
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I couldn't agree more. Retarded rape fantasies are not only disgusting, but fucking stupid as well. And worst of all UNORIGINAL.
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2007-02-20, 21:51
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YOu can see why I didn't like it as much.
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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2007-02-20, 23:10
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Yeah, that was a psycho waiting for the feds to say you're nuts.
 We understand and shrug it off with a roll of the eye, but someone else reading it might have heart failure.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2007-02-22, 04:15
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Do you think it could make a half decent grind song?
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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2007-02-22, 21:24
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It could make a very cliche grind song. Try expanding your horizons.
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2007-02-22, 23:56
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I used to spend my time writing Star Wars lyrics. This IS expanding my horizons. haha.
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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2007-02-28, 16:49
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Revised. I tried to remove some of the blunt gore.... somewhat.
Verse 1:
Innocent, sweet, pure female
In modest cloth, proper attire
Weak, frail, ripe, ready
Satisfaction guaranteed
Uncontrollable carnal urge
Erectile desire to be in her
No regard for her body or soul
Another shot to keep my high
Chorus:
I need my fix
My addiction to agony
A yearning for release
An orgasm through cruelty
Verse 2:
I slashed through the fabric so thin
I revealed the forbidden orbs of sin
Quivered and whimpered, a waste of time
My desire for brutality such a crime?
Pinned to the ground, my fix was due
The inevitable penetration, erect with glee
I thrust through the forest, broke the purity
Crimson and seed flowing like the Nile
Chorus:
I need my fix
My addiction to agony
A yearning for release
An orgasm through cruelty
Interlude:
Her vaginal gates defiled and ruined
The milky white skin slashed and wounded
My seed has been sewn for the day
I'll be eager to return to reap my rewards
No satisfaction felt, fix denied
Need more power, another hit of maim
Grabbing the once shimmering strands on her head
I stifle the noise as I feast on the pain
(guitar solo)
Outro:
Dead on the ground, covered with my lust
Red flowing out, flesh cold as a rock
I live for the sin, suffering just
Feed on the thrill, the terror, the shock
Buried, preserved for another day
Innocent no more, dormant in purgatory
To be continued, my lifeless precious
Until once more another day I need my fix
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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2007-02-28, 19:02
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Okay. I don't like the idea for the lyric, but this is better than the first one. There is one small typo that amused the heck out of me. After the slash came sewn --as in sew buttons on your underwear--please, change that to sown --as in seeding. A piece like this shouldn't make me giggle, but that little thing did.
Your flow. Your seperation. Your imagery was like a forensic tv documentary. That was right on. I just don't like cruelty like this so that's what turned me off.
You write well so you can write other topics, too. Just give them a shot also.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2007-05-26, 07:07
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It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.
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