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2007-01-30, 06:05
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Belle of the Stall
Seven come eleven, come Hell or high water
Come filth and come sickness, to son and to daughter
Call hens into roost and your cocks out to crow
And then choke on the fruit of the seeds you have sewn
I call you out, o ye of little faith
In your kind and all else
I merely wonder, o ye of endless waste
If you'd find opposition in Hell
Come one and come all, see the belle of the stall
Knee deep in what you are, its all too clear
The dirty kneed starlet, the harlequin harlot
You've buried the bar, and not shed a tear
Cast off your mask, o ye of moral feigned
It thinly veils who you are
Though your faces are many, o ye of several stains
They'll never obscure all the scars
If the world's your oyster, own up to the smell
All the swine ate your pearls, they were'nt the first and they could tell
I call you out, o ye of little faith
In your kind and all else
I merely wonder, o ye of endless waste
If you'd find opposition in Hell
Come one and come all, see the belle of the stall
Knee deep in what you are, its all too clear
The dirty kneed starlet, the harlequin harlot
You've buried the bar, and not shed a tear
Seven come eleven, come Hell or high water
Come filth and come sickness, to son and to daughter
Call hens into roost and your cocks out to crow
And then choke on the fruit of the seeds you have sewn
2007 STAIKY music
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2007-01-30, 10:21
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That was different. Sort of got an ELP "Karneval 9" feel on it only darker and more metal. Maybe the death metal version of that song? Anyways, this had some different imagery in it which was refreshing. Metaphors were all over the place and that made it fun to read. I think you could do a lot with it.
Structurally I don't see anything wrong with it at all.
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2007-01-30, 20:44
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This is pretty damn cool. idk, would it be a thrash, death, black, doom, or whatever song? It would be a good death metal song in my opinion. Better than the shit most people write on here. I'm impressed.
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2007-01-30, 20:44
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Thanks alot. I figured if I was going to do a song like this, I wanted it to be a little more to my tastes than most that take on the subject.
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2007-01-30, 21:13
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Originally Posted by northerndarkness
This is pretty damn cool. idk, would it be a thrash, death, black, doom, or whatever song? It would be a good death metal song in my opinion. Better than the shit most people write on here. I'm impressed.
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Probably thrash. I only say that though because that's what my band plays.
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Stand your ground behind the times
And refuse to follow fashion
Write your poetry in anger
And then sing it with a passion
Painted faces in a circus
Images they brings to mind
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2007-01-30, 21:59
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Really good. I'm impressed with your skills. What else ya got?
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2007-01-31, 01:41
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I've posted a few, I'll put up some more later tonight.
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Stand your ground behind the times
And refuse to follow fashion
Write your poetry in anger
And then sing it with a passion
Painted faces in a circus
Images they brings to mind
When I read my Penny Dreadful
Filled with pictures of your kind
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