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2006-09-30, 18:05
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Post-whore
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Future Mysticism
How about this? And as some of my critics have previously stated, it's not about me personally, although it contains many of my current beliefs.
The things in brackets are stimuli for when and if I come to improve it.
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Future Mysticism
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I am lost yet unafraid,
the only relation I know is that between the principles,
and the guiding elemental winds,
not between the structures that resist the flow.
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Many are ignorant,
they have not written the cosmos into themselves,
but look not down upon them,
for they still follow the winds.
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I am lost in timelessness,
for I know there in no now,
yet I am unafraind,
for I have no need for a now.
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To gaze and see emptiness,
is not enlightenment,
but a denial,
a common practice,
(you apply considerations as you did ignorant).
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To ascribe a consciousness,
to the final field of unity,
is a false comfort,
to obscure in the midst of clarity,
(to blunt the spikes you see in truth).
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But note that I have not shifted,
transcended any dimensions,
for I know the winds persist,
even after the veils are lifted and vanished,
(after the cosmos is printed into me).
^
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2006-09-30, 21:21
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Senior Metalhead
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I like it. Two things: you accidently added an N to the middle of unafraid in the third stanza. On this part: (you apply considerations as you did ignorant), did you mean ignorance?
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2006-10-01, 21:25
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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I liked it, too. This had an easier flow for me to follow than some of your other pieces. I liked the, I don't know how to describe it, maybe zen-like? feeling in the way you offered your ideas. It's got a quiet feel to it like a 3 a.m. conversation on the universe.
btw, clean out your pm's, please? 
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2006-10-03, 07:03
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Post-whore
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Sorry guys for the wait reply.
Thanks, Ludd. I see that 'n'. And, no, it's ignorant there. Read it again, it does make sense. The word is a part of the sentence.
Will do, LB. But away to school in a few minutes, so I'll do it when I return. I suppose the piece has a Zen-like feel. It does a bit like the Dhammapada (the collection of the Buddha's teachings), in how they arrange the verses. It's supposed to be the writings of a mystic, even though it is everything I currently believe, just in a very mystified form. I was also in a very calm and meditative mood when I wrote it.
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