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2006-09-28, 14:43
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Life is pain.
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Father Time
It pains me to believe in my heart
That I feel time is running out for you
Therefore us
As the world is wrapped in darkness
I can see you on my mind
My caretaker, my goddess
Powerful and strong
And the will to carry on
For so long I've been on your shoulders
And now it seems as though these may be our last days
I feel as though I've been foolish
Because every second in the presence of human zenith
Epitomises every second of human nadir
Emphasising the pain in life
And I realise I should have cherished every passing moment
Time gets the best of us all
My gun aimed at Father Time
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2006-09-29, 12:58
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Location: Home is where the <3 is
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I liked the last line best. It rounded the piece nicely. The elation and despair played well against each other.
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2006-09-29, 13:27
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Supreme Metalhead
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Join Date: Aug 2005
Location: Nowhereland, Illinois
Posts: 665
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Originally Posted by Infinity
It pains me to believe in my heart
That I feel time is running out for you
Therefore us
As the world is wrapped in darkness
I can see you on my mind
My caretaker, my goddess
Powerful and strong
And the will to carry on
For so long I've been on your shoulders
And now it seems as though these may be our last days
I feel as though I've been foolish
Because every second in the presence of human zenith
Epitomises every second of human nadir
Emphasising the pain in life
And I realise I should have cherished every passing moment
Time gets the best of us all
My gun aimed at Father Time
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very good, this is pretty well written, hmmm i might post some lyrics, maybe ill post a whole album worth of lyrics mwah ha ha!!!!!!! |
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