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2006-09-19, 14:41
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Life is pain.
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Caught In A Web
Darkness then surrounded me.
I can't move, caught in a web.
One with insects that are dead.
Despondency inside my heart.
Am I food to divinity?
Or does the spider only live inside me?
Only time will bring me truth.
Slowly starved while in my youth.
Others caught up in the web,
Are they like me?
Feeling time flying by,
They aren't like me.
Some fear the spiders grasp,
They aren't like me.
Some believe that they will starve,
They aren't like me.
Is this real or is this fake?
This web is sticky.
Is this real or is this fake?
What do I believe...
Is this real or is this fake?
I can hear him coming.
Is this real or is this fake?
To make up my mind is my last mistake.
Darkness still surrounding me.
Noone moves.
Goes to show that as I exact
Nothing proves.
I refuse to take this life.
The crescent of the hooded scythe.
Out of it's vicinity...
Waits to claim me.
Waits to claim me.
Waits to claim me.
Waits to claim me.
Waits to claim me.
Waits to claim me.
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2006-09-19, 14:57
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This is seriously kick ass. I dunno maybe i'm in the right frame of mind to read this one, but this one was good. I saw the title and was like ok... good to go lets see what it is.
But i mean the use of repitition, and even the use of hte title in the 2nd sentence seemed to make good sense.
This is one of your better ones.
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2006-09-19, 15:01
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Life is pain.
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Thanks, I wrote this to a song I wrote today  . just for the sake of it, it's ambiguous for religion and also the hardships in life. thats the metaphor so you should be able to make it out. |
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2006-09-19, 15:33
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Thanks, I wrote this to a song I wrote today . just for the sake of it, it's ambiguous for religion and also the hardships in life. thats the metaphor so you should be able to make it out. |
Didn't pick up on the religion but it wasn't overt anyways. I could tell this was to a song by the structure. A lil more standard than your usual stuff haha. No randomly long "sentences"
I have a few ideas for some new stuff that i gotta get down. Got a bunch of new material on the mind.
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2006-09-19, 21:10
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Cool song. Dark edged and good rhythm to it.
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2006-09-22, 00:27
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quite a catchy song sounds good but Dream theater has a song of the same name.
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2006-09-22, 01:07
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Life is pain.
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Fuck Dream Theatre.
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2006-09-22, 02:24
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What difference does it make? I remember Ludd putting out a piece called Ex Nihilo, which is the same name of an instrumental song done by Dark Tranquillity.
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