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Old 2006-09-03, 14:39
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Jacob Fitzlaff

Like a cold september raindrop,
We're on a one way avenue.

Peering out of our translucent joyride,
Watching the ground move closer.

And I've got nothing better to do than
Sit on my porch with a cigarette.

Letting life pass me by,
Getting older,
Getting colder,
While the raindrops of september fall from the sky.
Worker bees can leave,
Even drones can fly away.
The queen is their slave.
Old 2006-09-03, 15:02
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I think you should extend a little more with some 4 lined verses maybe and make this into song material. I was listening to Harry Nilsson's "Everybody's Talkin' " this morning and this has a feeling like that. Since I know what it's about I think that type mood would fit it just fine.

I really liked it, too. Very laidback and pretty. (just like you. )
My eldest son's bipolar website:

-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!

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