forsake individuality
for duality
mutual parasiticism
mirrored my psychoticism
because baby, you're betrayal
lets face it, you'd be happier with that guy
and i know why
but the carrot waves right in front of my eyes
i awaken to my own schism
and realise this is masochism
but to lose my solitude
is an equal magnitude
so tell me what i should sell first
my heart, mind, soul, or religion

i'm not 100% sure what it is about this one, but this one kicks ass.

Not too often you see something that rhymes well. The individual words in this one definately hold alot more weight than normally. The short well used words would be great behind some music. Definately will give me something to think about with my next work i think.

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This is good.

For Tmfreaks sake [and anyone else i guess] and to help everyone how emo i still am

forsake individuality
for duality - This bit means enter a relationship. Duality, sort of like the opposite of individuality, having 2 sides or ambiguous meaning

mutual parasiticism
mirrored my psychoticism - my belief is that relationships involve a mutual feeling of love and appreciation. but personally i have some very major issues about trust. mutual parasiticism is the fact that following my belief requires both people to feed off of each other, thats what the point of a relationship is. mirrored my psychotocism is that entering the relationship brought out my issues, mostly paranoia.

because baby, you're betrayal
lets face it, you'd be happier with that guy - obviously i feel that the chick is gonna hurt me some how, more than likely messing around with other guys or doing things that compromise my sanity [haha]. and the fact that i dont say that she's be happier with HIM and rather THAT GUY shows that i dont mean anyone specific on a personal level, she could be happier with someone that i could pick randomly because she wouldn't have to put up with my issues.

and i know why
but the carrot waves right in front of my eyes - i know this, but its hard for me to forget my feelings that i sometimes cant control.

i awaken to my own schism
and realise this is masochism - i realise that alot of the time the only thing i fear is make believe in my brain, so im divided on whether i should give up and try or keep fighting it, there is a part for both [a schism of myself], and obviously i know that its causing me alot of frustration and confusion [masochism self pain]

but to lose my solitude
is an equal magnitude - i know i cant forget my issues and to give up and try with a relationship would cause me equal pain than to keep fighting

so tell me what i should sell first
my heart, mind, soul, or religion - asking what i should do, give my heart which effectively changes my mind, taints my soul with hypocrisy and breaks everything i believe in, a total loss, a totally broken pride and ego.


Yes its all very emo and all very teenish but hey pst said it was good thats all that matters ahahahah but im sure the meanings you can get from this are ambiguous anyway so he might have got something else from it.

It sings despair...

I like it

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dude i just saw a post by JAMF and thought it was you, kindly ask him to remove his avatar1!!

Someone is using my avatar? I'm gonna flame them if they don't remove it.

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AT first i didn't like the "because baby, you're betrayal
lets face it, you'd be happier with that guy" part but that is actually a good break from the first half and the 2nd half.

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I liked this, too. I understand the feelings. Not necessarily because they're my own, but because of people I've been close to that have.

Although I got most of the ideas in it, I'm glad you put the explanations as they pertained to the piece.

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Maybe i'll start doing that. Might make me more accountable for the stuff that i write, (i.e. not just writing random thigns that loosely fit together, which occasionally i do)

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most people wouldn't know it but you could take any of my songs and i could make pefect sense of them for you

I'm very sure of that. It's when I write something myself and go back months later and wonder what the heck I was talking about that really gets me!
Sometimes just a brief intro is all that's needed for others to see what something is about. Sometimes it's cool to let us fend for ourselves awhile. I know I've gotten input in ways I never imagined for some of mine and I like that.

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