Vanishing System

Slowly dying. A slave of terror and corruption, A warrior of the new age. Face the thing that’s eats everything. Its name is fear…


Awake but still asleep. Never react . Never feel. Never see them die.


Even if you have dreams. They never seems to come true. Have you ever considered that it depends on you? No one cares about your life. No one wants to know. That even if you don’t want to see. You must open your eyes and believe.


Only crying. Never Fighting against The system, Like a bird in a small cage. Don’t now wich way to go. Your life is fear…


Awake but still asleep. Never react. Never feel. Never see them die.



Even, if you have dreams. They never seams to come true. Have you ever considered that it depends on you? No one cares about your life. No one wants to know. That even if you don’t want to see. You must open your eyes and believe.

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Is it so bad......no one even Replys

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That's not bad. It's somewhat pessimistic at first, but it seems like 'here's a kick in the balls' now stop complaining about everything. I like it.

But maybe that's just what I got out of it.

Doesn't it suck when you write something and no one responds? I hate that.

Okej Thanks Man =)

I think My Writing is geting better ....hehe

And The First part is Pritty Silly .....Will Maby change that....

And Yes It Sucks When no one responds

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It's definitely a big improvement. Keep up the good work.

Sometimes if I don't reply right away it's because I want to read it when I'm in the mood for it. I have times that things just muddle and I don't feel it's fair to comment. I know how you feel though. But look at how many hits it gets and at least you know someone might be reading it. Before one of the resets at tc we could not only see how many had read it, but who and that was really nice.

I thought it was good. It has a good flow to it and you got right to the point with the ideas. I liked where the repetious parts landed. It would make a cool song. Very much with the times as most generally being slaves to what the powers that be say.
Some heavier music would sound cool with it.

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Okej Thx Very Much .....We Play Melodic Death....and i think we will use this Text =)

Check us out if u Feel For It www.myspace.com/vanishingsystem


And By The Way i have a new Version Of Celebrating The End Of The World do u want me to post it?

i think its better then the last one

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Sure. Post it in the thread where the first version is. I'll go listen to your music.

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OKej im not home right now But will Post It later =)

Hope u like our songs pritty band remasterd But Many peapole Like it

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it did have flow, but the imagery you used to put your ideas on paper just seemed stale, it would probably work well in a song, but just in text it doesn't look very good.