I've been trying real hard to get myself out of a nearly four month writers block. I think I'm starting to get back into the swing of writing. Anyway, enjoy.

The smell of blood is thick and I've said
I've said every word I had to say
now as I fester here in contempt
I recall this was such a simple problem
now I'm being drown by these discrepancies
and these afflictions nothing but dillusions
fallen
into the same hole
over
and over again
I've not
lifted my head
in so long
these obstacles
over head appear
to me a horrible death
for every inch of this place

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Cool! I like the idea of starting with something that sounds cliche but then turns out to be a reminiscence very different from what i expected from the first few words.

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I like the self-reflectiveness of this and the very human idea of repeatedly making the same mistakes. I think that a reader could put their own metaphor to it and it might be very different from what you've actually meant. I think that makes an audience broader when you can do that.

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Thanks for the comments. I'm glad you liked it.

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