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2006-08-01, 08:43
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Life is pain.
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Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: Australia
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Verses of Love
... I'm dying...
The way the heart and the soul fight the mind.
The soul is deaf and the heart, it is blind.
The mind succumbs to a wave of irrationality.
A combination of lust, lines, life and personality.
My mind is trained and it is one with me.
It dictates the path I take from the canopy.
I live my life like lies, failure in my destiny.
And my paths like sadness reigning over me.
My love for you, is not stronger than my contempt for
Love, for you, is not stronger than my fear of love.
My love for you, is not stronger than my contempt for
Fear, of love
I've given to the maximum and paid so many dues
It makes me sick, who made you God, why can you pick and choose
My eyes are dark with the skies, they reflect my greyed bleak mind
In the world where love is death I am the one that is left behind
In life the world does not understand monogomy
And I have learned so I have let life take it away from me
In a world where the roles are reversed theres no understanding
A look into the past shows my heart and its frailty
My love for you, is not stronger than my contempt for
Love, for you, is not stronger than my fear of love.
My love for you, is not stronger than my contempt for
Fear, of love
Theres no heart but the one on the cards
And when played right it's shattered into many shards
I realised, that my own mind is my only enemy
Supress this section for economy
In a time of universal deceit
Telling the truth is revolutionary
Dont listen to your dreams
Dont trust in your hope
Dont live in a lie
Dont wish on the stars
I am one with lies
I am one with death
I understand everything
Therefore
I am nothing.
My love for you, is not stronger than my contempt for
Fear, of life.
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2006-08-01, 19:38
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Supreme Metalhead
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Join Date: Apr 2005
Location: Halifax, nova scotia
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Haha that was pretty damn good dude. The fact that we both used card analogies is funny:
"Theres no heart but the one on the cards
And when played right it's shattered into many shards"
"Cast your heart into a deck of iniquity
Pierced, bludgeoned, and inundation even, in a sea of diamonds.
Love; an incongruous assignment."
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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2006-08-02, 02:53
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Life is pain.
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WOW I missed yours!! that was great man its a great metaphor
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2006-08-02, 04:23
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Supreme Metalhead
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Location: Halifax, nova scotia
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yeah, i might edit it and post an updated version. After i finish another one, though.
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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2006-08-02, 08:35
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New Blood
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Join Date: Aug 2006
Location: Enid, Oklahoma
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Very well written. The rhyme scheme kinda bugged me though. Using the same rhyme got a bit redundant, but it didn't get in the way too much.
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All that's left is shadows
Cast by our shallow dreams
But the fire is still burning
So deep inside, inside of me...
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