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2006-07-28, 16:24
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Convalescence
A heart cleaved must know greater agonies;
The redeeming pain that succeeds the wound is a sublime irony.
Cast your heart into a deck of iniquity
Pierced, bludgeoned, and inundation even, in a sea of diamonds.
Love; an incongruous assignment.
Agony is conducive to irony.
Pain is synonymous with satire.
Weary now, we are consigned to trust.
Now, we wait. There is nothing left to discuss.
Find temperance in the firestorm of passion; for the flames lick at the wound,
And it will cauterize it soon,
But for complete convalescence you must know the piercing kiss of temperance.
What must be done to close this gaping maw of flesh?
I should burn the wound with charnel flames or stitch it closed at my behest;
A wound sewn shut would hold strong for now, but the trial of time tests with no hope of reconcile.
Perhaps the wound purged with fire heal will heal the best.
By the convalesced blood which flows through these veins,
A wiser man remains.
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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2006-07-28, 17:08
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HES BAAACK
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too many "big words" man, its cool that you have a vocabulary like that but it seemed unnecessary to me
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2006-07-28, 17:08
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slack as fuck
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Nice. I love the feel to that one
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Fucking on the couch while posting on Metaltabs and getting caught by your mother....
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2006-07-28, 17:14
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Originally Posted by Transient
too many "big words" man, its cool that you have a vocabulary like that but it seemed unnecessary to me
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hmm, good point there. I dont think the other two are as wordy, though. Then again, they're shorter. btw, thanks mike!
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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Last edited by IlikeRiffseveryone : 2006-07-28 at 23:46.
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2006-07-31, 03:13
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Not too many big words - how many is too many? - but some of them just don't do anything where you put them except kill any chance at flow.
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2006-07-31, 22:20
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Lyrics sure are a lot better than the Darkest Hour version  Those are seriously really good though. Thats some robust verbiage you got going on there.
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Compare these people to the norm, say, Muhammed Suiçmez for instance who seems to think that lots of poorly strung together riffs spaced awkwardly around fancy monotonous sweeps covers up the fact that his ideas and songs are really quit boring.
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2006-07-31, 22:25
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Glad you liked it, BDB.
regarding that matter pst, I think thats the very reason why it probably seemed unnecessary to him. The flow around the beginning to middle is pretty bad, but I think it gets better past the half-way mark.
Suggestions for revision, anyone?
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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2006-08-01, 09:32
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Life is pain.
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I liked the ideal, funny i just wrote a fairly big lyric about almost the same thing, with a slightly different ideal and perspective, check it out. and yes i agree on the too many big words type thing it subtracts chance for a connection on a personal level I think but thats me.
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