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2006-07-26, 13:10
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Life is pain.
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Verses of Heart
Feeling
Of Drowning
Can I
Keep Trying
Heart is
Fragile
Naive
Weak
Sans eyes
If It
Could See
Love
Would
Never
Be...
I
No
Longer
Believe...
Can you
See it's failure
Can you
See it's flaws
Why not
Act on danger
Close the doors
Heart...
Heart is
Sentient
Control
It seeks
I won't
Give in
Deny the
Dream
It's gone
Severed
I will
Never, Never, Never, Never...
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2006-07-26, 16:32
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That had great flow to it. I didn't stumble a bit on any of it. I liked the idea, too. Very nicely done.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-07-26, 16:41
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slack as fuck
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I like it.
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2006-07-26, 17:24
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Quantum.
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For some reason I liked this one better than the other, the one of the mind.
Is is metal frenezy or humble calmness your're aiming for?
And I do feel it worth pointing out that there are many dreams worth following up, not to mention follow home.
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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2006-07-26, 18:52
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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I was thinking that, but this is about his character's opinion so I refrained. Sometimes it seems like this is very true though. "And the darkest hour is just before dawn." --Mama Cass
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-07-27, 08:33
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Life is pain.
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This goes to a song I wrote the music for it wil be in the next competition you can check it out there if you want i will post in here to let you guys know.
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2006-07-29, 04:19
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Supreme Metalhead
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i think the rhythm in this one is excellent.
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i have to make this gay ass puppet, for mole day or some shit.
i need ideas. so far i got children of moldem and yngwie molesteen.
yes its a gay project, and no im not in special needs class.
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