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Silence Keeps screaming

2006-07-01, 11:14

Carl

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Silence Keeps screaming

Here Is A Txt That The Guitarist In My Band Wrote And I really like it....

Silence keep screaming

Burn their eyes so bright defines
This horror story with all the signs
Made for them to be alive
After days shadows remains
Blood taste nice in mouth of god
Slowly felling his need of them

Frozen morning for a cost
Celebrating one lights lost
Lies are like blood in vein
Everything that will remain

World of promises is gone
All to remain is dawn
The beauty of life
Is sticked to the knife

Frozen morning for a cost
Celebrating one lights lost
Lies are like blood in vein
Food for starvation will remain

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2006-07-01, 11:43

L,B'XXX

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Sorry, but that was one of the most forced sounding pieces I've ever read. It didn't do a thing for me. The way the rhyming was done just tormented it. It would have been better to let the thoughts gel together without the rhyme in this case to make it less scattered.

Maybe next time. Hey, if you like it and it works well for your band then cool.

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2006-07-01, 12:16

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I think it's pretty cool. Certainly not as L,B'XXX put it, I mean, it deserves a bit more than that.

But yeah, it's not excellent, but it does the job

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