Standing in an enchanted forest of wonders
listening to the wind blow away the trees leaves
trying to figure out why the sky is so blue today
as I stare at the reflection of the sun in the water
I feel warm and welcome outside in this colorful place
but the sunlight doesn’t seem to shine through my eyes
to unfreeze my love dehydrated heart alive
as I run towards the lake I hear a whisper echo
"the time is free, take me now to death without a lullaby!"
And I turn around ignoring the voice and walk towards a cave
and it is filled with giant cold revealing icicles
that reflects my shadow, showing me what future lies ahead
transparent warm light blue trees tower above me
the sun shining through a hole at the top of the cave
shines through the breathtaking sight of life
and I think to myself why is the edge of my heart ringing with horror?
As I find myself staring at cold dark eyes that have appeared before me
I turn to run towards the light to shatter my locked freedom
but the darkness in me runs the opposite direction
pulling me towards the black eyes of fear
then I cry out for a gentle pain to be injected in me
but as I get towards the eyes I see...me.-no heart

I don't think the first line did anything for the piece. I'd ditch that. It sounds too "once upon a time" and the rest of the piece portrays the feelings and imagery you're going for. The line about the warm blue trees I think could use something more descriptive than just blue. Perhaps a particular shade of blue. You may or may not be referring to something like blue spruce, but that was the shade I pictured. If it's a bizarre blue for a tree to be a specic hue might dress that up a bit. Just suggestions. I liked this piece. It had some interesting imagery.

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