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2006-04-08, 09:19
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Left to Be
Send to the front whit a lie as a guide now its to late to step a side , forced to fight whit death in my site no man will stand in the end of the night.
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Bullets are flying every were fired by men whit no chance . what is this some kind of hell , maby god can tell? ......LEFT TO BE
Like a coward i fel like an coward i will appeal the generals are getting there medals whiel we are dying on the fields.....
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2006-04-08, 12:28
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If it's a fight to read I'm put off and won't do more than a skim. It's a little thing I learned 30 years ago about submitting to editors.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-04-08, 12:44
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Okej?
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2006-04-08, 12:58
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What?  
Did you edit it? Maybe the typos I'm seeing are due to English being secondary. Okay, I read it. It's got a beginning, middle, and end that are very basic. It's okay the way it is, but if there was more meat to it it mightmake it more memorable. On the other hand something simple could be a very easy to learn piece lyrically.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-04-08, 16:25
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2006-04-08, 22:57
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Intresting song. Actually a buddy of mine had that happen to him. (the last sentence) He was put up for the bronze star for actions that he did, and his lut. over him got it instead, and he wasn't even there.
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...Its very annoying to keep having to hear some socially-disabled teen come on these boards talking about all the drugs he's started doing so that he can maybe grasp onto some kind of positive response so he feels better about himself and what he's doing.
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2006-04-09, 09:40
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Originally Posted by tmfreak
Intresting song. Actually a buddy of mine had that happen to him. (the last sentence) He was put up for the bronze star for actions that he did, and his lut. over him got it instead, and he wasn't even there.
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