here is 4 diferent songs cause i wanted to see if i could write more than my usual 'poetic black metal'. if you wanna see my normal and typical work, check out Covenant of Aphony and Sepuchral Silhoeutte. overwise...gimme a critic on these

This is my pure satanic death metal orientated song...i suppose you can guess the influence

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-Impaled Lamp (Ravenous Goat)

Blasphemy is the theme of his creation
Devouring your soul in the name of Satan
His blind-folded herd stalls in decretion
Fist fucking his whore upon my completion

IMPALED! IMPALED LAMB! (Ravenous Goat!)
IMPALING THE LAMB!

I AM THE GOAT! I AM THE GOAT!

Demise of your God, I'll leave you asking why
I just want you dead, killing your God I hear you cry!

IMPALED! IMPALED LAMB!

Your just the filth of his creation
Darkness unites in the name of Satan
The christian souls are in decretion
Fucking with your head upon my completion

IMPALED! IMPALED LAMB! (Ravenous Goat!)
IMPALING THE LAMB!

I AM THE GOAT! I AM THE GOAT!

Christ dies! Christian cries!
Evil unite, with Satan we fight!
Destroying your faith we ignore your plight!

I AM THE GOAT! I AM THE GOAT!

Demise of your God, I'll leave you asking why
I just want you dead, killing your God I hear you cry!

IMPALED! IMPALED LAMB! (Ravenous Goat!)
IMPALING THE LAMB!

I AM THE GOAT! I AM THE GOAT!

This is my pagan rich black metal song (anyone familer with the Magan text?)

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-They Rent With Fear...

With the glance of death
In just one breath
The moon just crest
And gave one breast
The wooden gate opened fate
Her corpse hung from a wooden stake

The faceless Gods of the Absu
Fixed her with the eye of death
She was marked in fate, they celebrate
Tearing away and Ereshkigal rejoiced!

"Enki summoned forth the clay in hope for a brighter day"

They took her eyes and loved her cries
Sixty demons tore at her side
They took her ears and sensed her fears
Blind Azag-Thoth rejoiced!

They binded her in darkness
And chained her in the seas
Speaking only few words
As if they drew their swords
She raised her arm, in all alarm
Iak Sakkak rejoiced!

In the castle of death
He hears of her slumber
And is left with a jaggared glass heart
How the face of the damned
Opened its mouth
And swallowed the Queen of Heaven

The ancient messenger took her jewels
She whined and harped and pittied self
They spoke and she descended to Kur
In the depths of evil she went down
Ishniggarab Rejoiced!

She appeared before the mistress of death
As they screamed at her presence
The magician was summoned and binded her to darkness
Chaining her to the depths of the ocean the mighty Kutulu rejoiced!

She whispered and spoke
It sounded oh so sweet
Still they imprisioned her to death

Why must you take my jewels
As my wish is to pass the gate

"Thus it is, the covenant of old, set down before time.
The rules of the lady of Kutu.
Enter the Seventh Gate and behold the nether world."

My power metal tune, written with the music of Kamelot in mind but extemely cheesy lyrics.


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-Riding the Wind of Honor

I am the man of honor
All bound in glory
I am the man of honor
Bound in veracity

(chorus)
Who will ride with me on the wind of honor?
And determine the rightious and slay the horror?
For I am the knight with the elven forged bow
Riding on the winds of honor lets fend the doe

All my foes have come to face me
But this time I will not flee
For this time is to fight for Karma
And the fire in my soul gates my wisdom

Here I stand a small and simple man
But with the heart of a dragon!

(chorus)

Who will train my heir when i leave the kingdom
Please when I pass do not leave them to fathom

When I depart it will be on the wind of honor
For all I have done in live was for you
And all through my life it was the seed that was sown
Slay the menace that threatens the kingdom!

(chorus)

I got bored...so here is a shitty emo song! (with a serious topic)


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-What would you do if that was you?

Teenage girl on the corner for sale
With nowhere to go and no home
Old man dead in an ally way
With no place to call his own
But most of you don't give a shit...

(Chorus)
Most of your are lost in your little worlds
These people would do anything to have it like you
You don't even know what's going on outside
Open your window and look beyond your pride

Little girl standing alone and crying
With her mummy making a living
Kids just taking drugs at will
And your life is thriving
But most of your don't give a shit...

(Chorus)

Looking around and you refrain
The streets cry out in vain

(Chorus)

Crackhead wants changed nearby
Poverty cries out overhead
What would you do if that was you?
Wouldnt you take it out on everyone too?

Theres no room in jails
And another kid just jumped
What would you do if that was you?
Wouldn't you take it out on everyone too?

Overpopulation and crowded streets
Your daughters a porno star
And your son dealt death
But your pride is on your shoulders

What would you do if that was you?
Wouldn't you take it out on you too?
If everyone else was just like you
And you were like everyone else
What would you do if that was you?
Wouldn't you take it out on you too?

What would you do...

damn, why are you so good at writing lyrics.

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awww shucks

You really are a great writer, I actually like the last one best, but I'm partial to more emotional and personal types of things.

Keep up the good work.

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http://www.geocities.com/gwobsessio.../Heero/see.html
looks a lot like your last one..

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ancient thread.