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Old 2006-03-02, 10:03
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Weary and worn,
From the corner of my eye,
I Hope for a glimse of her.

Though I know far too well,
Deep inside,
To search for another cure.

Darkness shrouds around
Me like a blanket
The cold asphyxiation sets in.

Let the downward spiral begin.

But lest me not forget –
To see through the fog,
For through winter lies spring



Yeah, emo, haha. Just had a random attempt though, not sure if I like it.
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Old 2006-03-02, 10:36
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I think its a little cliche but on the right path.
 
Old 2006-03-02, 12:07
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I thought it was quite pretty and not whiney emo. I use the seasonal metaphors sometimes so I liked that. Nice piece.
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Old 2006-03-02, 20:00
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Thanks Guess it is a bit cliche, but i guess the feeling being expressed is cliche
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Old 2006-03-02, 23:08
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Like i read or heard somewhere. A cliche is a cliche for a reason. Although seeming used in a deragatory manner cliched ideas are good ideas.

I liked it. Intresting natural rhythm.
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