I said i will post all my other songs in their own threads so here is one.

Thx for reading and writing comments

The Will to Kill

The sound of shield and sword
Two Armies ready for Fight
Trained by the lore of war
To kill with all ones might

Normal men like everyone
On battlefield wolves and bears
When they fight they fight alone
They know no fear

They say they fight for their land
But what they lead is another will
It is the will to kill

They do what they have to do
They fight for lord and land
But if the hate is coming through
They become a ruthless band

At least they all will be free
And soothe their lust
When they die by the enemy
And fall in the dust

They say they fight for their land
But what they lead is another will
It is the will to kill

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It's not bad. The last verse when it says they all are free seemed to go against what the previous ideas were that it wasn't about a particular side, but the collective warriors on both sides. Maybe it's just the way I'm reading it.
I thought this could have a good driving beat to it and really add some punch to a line up. At least the way I'm hearing it in my head. lol

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Well it is alleready a complete song guitars and drumparts and bassparts are allready written and yes it has a very driving beat ^^
with the last verse the are free of this wil (the will to kill)

This is our best song I mean with the music...it rocks ^^

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Malevolent creation already have a song with this tittle. Their lyrics are very different though, so I guess that shouldn`t stop you from using yours.

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I wondered if I should quote the first line just for clarification. I was referring to the part that begins --"At least they all will be free." I think it's the word "all" that's making me think it's a little awkward. The first 2 lines are about winners and the latter about losers so the "all" threw it off. Does that make more sense?

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This song is about all warriors. They fight as long as they can...until they die. It makes no difference from which army they are on battlefield they are all the same. Fighters who die at last.

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Gotcha. I thought that's what you were going for. Thanks for the clarification. Any chances of hearing it?

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hmm we are a pretty new band and all quite at the same age as me and we never recorded anything. We even dont know how to do it how much it would cost...

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That's cool. Snoop around the forums here. You'll pick up some good ideas.

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Oh come on i've been recording since the moment i picked up an instrument =) Get a Shure 57 and 58 mic. Download Adobe audition. Record the band as a whole, then come back and record each individual part. Badabing badaboom.

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the song wasn't too bad

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