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2006-02-16, 21:32
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"Something to Bite Into"
"Something to Bite Into"
Jacob Fitzlaff
2/16
The loathing that hides in me,
Will reflect on you.
Ev'ry word you have spoken,
They have belied you.
So give me a taste,
Give me a piece of you,
Give me just one chance,
And I will drive these nails through!
Something I can bite into.
A life I can ruin.
The pain inflicted on me,
Now brought unto you.
Vengeance has such a sweet taste,
Extracted from you.
So give me a taste,
Give me a piece of you.
Give me just one chance,
So I can drive these nails through!
Something I can bite into.
A life I can ruin.
The hatred that flows through me,
Will flow out of you.
Everything you said you were not,
Has now defined you.
Something I can bite into.
A life I can ruin.
I will devour you.
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Worker bees can leave,
Even drones can fly away.
The queen is their slave.
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2006-02-18, 13:43
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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You really want those brownies, don't you? hehe
Though it all was good, I thought you captured a good thought in this -
The hatred that flows through me,
Will flow out of you.
Everything you said you were not,
Has now defined you.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-02-18, 18:13
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Post-whore
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Oddly enough that was the first part I wrote, but it didn't fit at the begining.
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2006-02-18, 22:45
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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I don't think it does either. The verse that begins "The pain inflicted on me," could go at the beginning because that would be a good intro, too, but I think it's fine the way it is.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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