heres an emo song my friends wrote....
tell me what you think about the lines



ynahs dilemma



show me a way without u
slowly i fade as i walk alone
praying lord please take me home
Heal my wounds. erase all my sorrow


my strong heart stirs the ever beating sea
its deepest thoughts surpasses the undenying path
No more pain, no more love
but i wont choose suicide as a way out
When will it be over? Millions of people, but I'm still alone in this world shaded grey
clutching hands so tight
My heart locked shut, and I gave you the key
u leave me in the middle of this four walls
i cannot breath im Gasping for air...
i cannot see ...darkness fills my broken heart
you are the worst mistake I ever made
Tears grow Recollecting the memories
as i leave behind the smiles of yesterday
you are a year to forget


u always say ur sori
all i asked ...was for u to love me
i hope you can hear me as i cry
No more, I'm fed up with this
u buried a thorn in my trust
She got ways to make me crawl

The face of joy I once wore is now only a dream
(show me a way without u)
Retching on promises never delivered
(slowly i fade as i walk alone)
as i lift another page another life another day
(i'm praying lord please take me home ....
i'm catching every drop of hope..in my empty cup)

A cut shatters all structures
...in tears they fall
i'll Walk this path
I hold my chest as tomorrow bleeds away.
Portraits of a past fade for a moment it was so clear
nothing says I love you like slit wrists
i love u goodbye!




I walk along these memories

(words ..words speak through scars)
(hate me/you know its over )


Grief awakens the blackness in my room
for I see/ myself alone waiting for nothing.
The breeze of angels wings started to blow
but hurt enters as the night drifts on..
thy love was taken away by my darkest depressions
and buries it into a grave....A GRAVE of sorrow .

Mend me jesus, I cried ..you re all that ive got now

i'll make things on my own (2x)
wat can I say..wat can I do ..id had enough of thee

hope finds itself and it end, stopping in my thoughts...
theres nothing u can do...
were on our own

Lies still holds thee and I pray that it reaches a point of exhaustion..
a point where you can never conquer my happiness again

Mend me jesus, I criedyou re all that ive got now

i'll make things on my own (2x)
wat can I say..wat can I do ..id had enough of thee

hope finds itself and it end, stopping in my thoughts...
theres nothing u can do...
were on our own

i'll make things on my own(2x)

words speak ,words speak through scars. 2x

mend me jesus ... i cried..you re all that ive got now 2x

well i cant stand her im so sick ..(i cant ..be ur shadow)
well i think its better to stay away (we're on our own)

Is this 2 seperate pieces? I know it says song, but where the line "I walk along these memeories" is seems like the beginning of a seperate song.

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YTF did you write a emo song, and wtf did u show us at metaltabs

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Say, tripple-x, are we seeing some surpressed emotions here? Reconnecting to earlier posts, I believe this to be the case. You just wait guys. This night, the pyre will burn in here backyard. A copy of this song is there.

Interesting, interesting. Now tell me, in percentage of the total population, how many teenagers do not, at some point, write something like this?

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You saw my pyre? Was it showing?
I was asking questions before my attack. If it's all one piece I'll comment one way, but if it's two I'll treat it differently. But I remember where my roots in writing were so I'll be fair with my opinion.

Even though something has "emo" lyrics it can still be made into metal. Some of the metal I've heard if I'd just read the lyrics I'd have thought it was something definitely not metal. That first one has In Flames or Cradle of Filth written all over it.

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Man.... the site is called metaltabs METAL. why post that here? i mean if there was another word for metal it would be called antiemo!

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The easiest way to get around that is to not label the piece, let people form their own music in their head, and let them comment on what they think it might sound like. Some are obvious as to what they are, but I don't think these are.
It also says "poetry lyrical." Spoken word without a musical reference in some way cannot be a particular genre. It may evoke a mood, but that mood is not a type of music.

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I through the first 4 lines of it and about...

Too late

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Next person to point out that it's emo and this is a metal tabs site gets on my shit list.

Next person to compare the first set of lyrics here to In Flames gets a vacation. Jesus.

That aside, not very good work. I'll never understand why people think that injecting their prosaic, inept lines with the occasional overly purple one makes the 'poem' more poetic. It's impossible to breathe here. You'd be best off scrapping it all and starting over again without concerning yourself beforehand with being emo or poetic or whatever, though I'm afraid that would also come out poorly.

i dont know about in-flames but this is so much like the linkin park songs on the radio.
by which i mean it sucks

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so you remember the lyrics of linkin park songs do ya?

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Remember? Please, if you know how to get them out of my head, feel free to let me know.

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Heres a tip-
Don't listen to the radio.

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what do u do when u are in your dads old fucked up car with a fucked up radio and n0 cd changer
atleast in other places you can wack off

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You bitch about it at chit chat. Turn it off and SIIIIIINGGGGG!!!!

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