I wrote this for a doom metal song.
It's very personal, mind you

Requiem for a Lost Cause

Every morning at daybreak,
as Sol's light stirs me from my slumber
I am torn between satisfaction, and the right choice

All I ever do is to close my eyes
to pretend being something I am not
And to think I made an oath
Not to be like this

I feel that I failed myself

Coiling in a spiral of disillusion
through which I chase far away dreams
Empty shell of what coul be
It is mocking me
While I rob myself of options

I am mad with discontent

Frail as you are
Turning to you regained my veiled stability
Assumed all but lost
For I long to your embrace,
the strength you gave,
your beauty
Alas, I lost you to your doubts
And thus hope for better days
came crashing down
Leaving me to my old ways again

I liked this a lot, but in the second part all the "to's" seemed too much.

All I ever do is close my eyes
to pretend being something I am not
And think I made an oath
Not to be like this

I don't think that changes what you're saying. It's just an option.

I found the thought flow very good in this. You never came right out and said what the issue was so I liked that. I could make it personal for my own life situation as you did your own writing it. Really cool. I'd like to hear this hooked up. I'm listening to some new In Flames and I bet this would sound good with the combination of growl and melodic vocals.

The title made me think of powers' after the last piece he posted though.

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thanks. heh, i didn't even noticed the to's until you pointed it out

well, they guys are comming over. I think we'll have a blast, considering we have so many new material now

pretty good...dont you prefer to write in dutch though?

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haha no. actualy, most musicians here prefer to write in english. it's a more musical language.

cool then, i didnt spot any english errors so more power to you. accents usually get lost when people sing, too so i bet oyu sound perfect

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haha thanks. but I don't realy sing that well, I just wrote it for the vocalist