Just a short one with basis in older pieces of mine. Maybe a Zakk type piano piece would be good for this. Like "Too Numb Too Cry" only not quite as darkly dramatic. Thanks for the read.

" Winter Has Fallen "

Winter has fallen over me.
The blades of grass bending invisibly.
The buried branches that have rotted and fallen--
Stretching feeble fingers upwards.
Winter has fallen over me.
But as the chill cuts through fall
And the barren trees grey
I see hope of spring in the buds
On the white laced branches.
And I still feel warmth inside.
Winter may have fallen
But spring still is in my heart.

BJH
12/4/2005

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I like.

Here I go again. Excuse and explanation have already been given, social demands fullfilled and no scruples on my part.

Classical composition, starting off with imaginery and giving us a scene in just a few short sentences, which is something of an art in itself. The repetition of "Winter has fallen/may have fallen" is just right. Though, when I read it loud I felt that "still" and "it" should swap places. The wording is poetic all the way, so to use a "normal" sentence in the end feels right to me. And it gives room for a nice little pause just before the hopeful ending - "But spring (small pause) is still in my heart".
As i said, classical. Classical, pleasent and filled with the kind of hope that has some sort of relevance in real life. I do like the way you make your language work.

Not sure of music, but I'm quite sure you'll be able to come up with something if you want to. Though piano is probably quite right, if not a lonesome acoustic guitar.

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*i'n'h* -- Thanks!

I was wondering about the still/it line myself when I reread it. I'm still not sure about it. I don't know if it makes a difference grammatically. I don't see it changing the meaning at all whether it's one place or the other. Glad you pointed that out though. At least I know you read a few lines.
I'm glad you liked it, too. Thank you.

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