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2005-12-02, 15:12
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Don´t Cry for the shadows
Don´t Cry for the shadows
Like A Sculpture he stands the man that demands he can´t give and he wont forgive
The thin red line that tears my spine Where Did it Come From why did I lie
My sorrow is Growing my heart is not alive the anger not fading i can only die
I live the sadness and watch the madness , growl of darkness touch my ears
Fury of the mad makes us sad, deep depression makes infection
Stains of tears touch the fears, burning silence now it all came clear
Shadows rise,roll the dice unspoken minds kill the signs "of life"
Darkness layng the distance.........
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2005-12-02, 16:46
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Amazing.....man......keep up the good writing......bitch
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2005-12-02, 17:43
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Quantum.
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See? Told you it had potential.
Hitta nu bara på någon lämplig Megadeth-inspirerad - till exempel - musik att lägga till så har du en riktig låt.
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"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
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2005-12-02, 17:49
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Quantum.
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Originally Posted by calle_von_dark
Stains of tears touch the fears, burning silence now it all came clear
Shadows rise,roll the dice unspoken minds kill the signs "of life"
Darkness layng the distance.........
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Check spelling the last line. Maybe "comes" instead of "came"? Oh, I see now how "came" fits, never mind.
Those final lines really got a good punch; I tried reading them out loud and I liked the feeling of them; both technically and for what they convey.
OK, you death metallers can say what you like about this, but:
Please tell me you are not going to make a growl out of this?
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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2005-12-02, 18:03
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New Blood
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Fán va shyst asså altid gött med bra respons....vi ska inte gö ett growl av låten vi spelar trash med små inslag av death....
bara så du vet så va gitaristen i bandet me å skrev lite okså han vill gärna att ja ska säga det  |
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2005-12-02, 18:28
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Quantum.
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Äras den som äras bör, jojo.
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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2005-12-02, 19:22
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Not bad at all. Good to see you added more to it. I still think that dividing up the phrases would make it easier to get the feel, but that's my own preference.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-12-02, 19:51
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New Blood
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thank's allways god to get some credit.....
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2005-12-02, 20:21
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´Tanks
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2005-12-03, 02:52
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slack as fuck
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stop talking to yourself!!!
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2005-12-03, 04:10
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Jono
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Are they the fucking same person or what?
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2005-12-03, 10:19
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Are they the fucking same person or what?
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2005-12-03, 10:30
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Originally Posted by Amadeus
See? Told you it had potential.
Hitta nu bara på någon lämplig Megadeth-inspirerad - till exempel - musik att lägga till så har du en riktig låt.
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2005-12-04, 09:20
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Post-whore
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Damn swedes  |
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2005-12-04, 11:55
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Senior Metalhead
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Are they banned because they are the same people?
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2005-12-04, 12:31
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they're fucking tab thieves, that's the main reason.
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