my friend wrote this when... tell me what you think. ur interpretation and any suggestions or improvements needed




drunkards

feeling drunk, mind is naked
everything seems down and blue
every meeting of mind meets nothing
listening thoughts all uncertain

small thoughts turns to silence
liquor tastes a big depression
mere minds makes connections
though something inside yells distraction

this is how these words flow
fragile minds creates deeper meanings
conformity of thoughts emanates on me
thats how drunkard minds sought insanity

lefty words seems low and fragile
like every struggle finds peace and rest
scars of pleasure triggers intentions
making us more hard to handle




sounds crap .......bwahahahaha


tell me what u think

On first read I wasn't keen on it so I gave it another chance. I got a better flow the second time. I thought the word insanity broke the flow. It's not too bad, but it just didn't do much for me either. I'm just one person though so others may really get something from it.
What's a lefty word?

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:P

You mean : P as in ?


And yes, I had to edit that puny little post.

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