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2005-11-22, 20:42
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Proetry
Decency destroys common sense.
Making a mess of living,
gives us pedantic glee.
Straight off the assembly line,
just one more atrocity.
(We come like drumming thunder
Tides enwreathed in scum and plunder
Kraken-teethed to tear asunder
All those too blind to see...) - "cradle of filth"
and Rainbows bleed torrents of violet,
We will never escape our pasts, or our fathers.
No matter how hard we flee.
Embrace is not an option.
Rainbows bleed floods of orange.
They only catch us in the afterwoods.
Although we don't see it,
the charity is our downfall.
rainbows bleed.
- It's never too late
to change your underwear.
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nigger, i hate jews, I have a bomb on my chest and I'm going to kill the President of America, nigger, nigger, I rape children, death to america.
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2005-11-22, 22:12
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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What's afterwoods? Is that something or a typo?
I kind of liked this because of the imagery in it. First verse had a good flow to it. And then I like the use of color in the other parts.
" and Rainbows bleed torrents of violet," --cool line.
I think if you added something more specific of your own to it to add a little more story to it it might add more dimension, but it's not bad like this.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-23, 08:21
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thank you.
afterwoods is a word I used to mean the future, but at the same time sound like a physical location where a person could literally be "caught". Hard to explain i guess.
also many verses excluded, very drunk last night.
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Originally Posted by BassBehemoth
nigger, i hate jews, I have a bomb on my chest and I'm going to kill the President of America, nigger, nigger, I rape children, death to america.
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2005-11-23, 15:10
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Well, get them together if they're legible and maybe this can get more body to it.
Thanks for the explanation on that word, too.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-23, 15:26
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The Man Who Is, MGI.
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Lol Proetry
Not a bad piece of writing though  |
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2005-11-23, 15:55
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I am a tax on the world..
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Your title is a contradiction.
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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2005-11-23, 19:01
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The Man Who Is, MGI.
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Your title is a contradiction.
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2005-11-29, 23:18
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@#$ ya, contra*fucking*suckmyass. $#@
disease, death, ..., tolerant.
right - wrong.
give me a final def.
your attachment is the only defective.
don't tell me TASTE.
there is always an amen,
there is always a foul.
just give up.
erase yourself.
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Originally Posted by BassBehemoth
nigger, i hate jews, I have a bomb on my chest and I'm going to kill the President of America, nigger, nigger, I rape children, death to america.
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