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2005-11-06, 17:15
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This is a spoken intro to a song I'm currently working at. It's the first whole lyric section and I thought it might be interesting to hear the oppininons of some metal heads too.
Well, without further ado:
God, holy father
Hallowed may be thy name
Thy kingdom might come
But that certanity is still a long way off
Our daily bread, a question of luck
So forgive us for forgetting
For the shortest of moments
That thy world is a trial
And lead us not into temptation
For our legs works just fine
In our short strife
To make the world
A fun place to be us in
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2005-11-06, 17:23
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HES BAAACK
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dude thats the best lyric ive ever seen on here, no exaggeration
lead us not into temptation, for our legs work just fine!!!!!
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2005-11-06, 23:35
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It took a second read for me to get the flow, but for reason I found it a bit sarcastically humorous. Not that that's a bad thing. It sounds okay to me, but get that extra 's' out of the phrase Tranny liked. I liked that part, too.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-07, 11:52
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Ah well, spelling correction done. Yes, it is meant as a humourous piece; it is a humourous ballad!
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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2005-11-07, 12:24
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Okay, there Weird Al II. Show us what ya got!
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-07, 21:38
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WHAT?! Me scared by suchy remarks! Umm... where you refering to the rest of the song? Haven't finished it yet.
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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2005-11-07, 22:44
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No, I didn't think you were scared. Yeah, I was.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-08, 19:18
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Well well, when it's finished I'll be sure to publish it here first of all.
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Listening to Cannibal Corpse and cutting trees with a chainsaw, now that's metal
"He preferred the hard truth over his dearest illusion. That, is the heart of science."
- Carl Sagan
"Imagination is more important than intelligence" - Einstein
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