Just some prose I wrote. I'm looking to get it published.

http://hsa.albertlea.k12.mn.us/kissme/free_will.htm

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great ending. i really got into that

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I read the first chapter yesterday, but you know me with my darned ole headaches. It was a nuisance so I came back with the intention of just reading a chapter and read the whole thing. It wasn't something I'd normally pick out for myself to read, but it was interesting thinking of the reasons why they were in the positions they were in.

How did you come up with the idea for this? It's a little bit different than that other piece I'd read of yours. lol

Flow, wording, and all that were fine to me.

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Well written and a good, tasteful approach to the subject; a touch of Hemingway. Do you intend to publish it as a short story, or is it meant for the stage? And while asking that, I wondered of I could I use this piece with some of my students? It would be a downright perfect training object.

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Yo if you's like this and the dude that wrote it you'd like some shit I got next time your on ask for it!

that was amazing. you should definitely get that published. i wish i had as much as an insightful imagination as you do.

Whoa...forgot I posted this. Yeah Amadeus you can use it for your students if you still wish to. Just give credit where it's due.

Whether it is meant for stage or short story glory I'm not sure.

I'd also like to know which character you liked the most and why.

Sorry for bringing this back to the front page, but I'm looking to revise it soon, now that I actually have time to write again.

Sincerest apologies and thanks for the comments.

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Hmm, I worry about him. He's using your stories and my lyrics. That's scary.

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Or erotic depending on your point of view

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Now that's REALLY scary! Given what he wanted to use that I wrote. haha

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Now I am creeped out.

Does Amadeus even come around anymore? Hmm...If not, maybe other people will give feedback. I hate getting the "Oh, it's great! Simply amazing!" feedback. It doesn't help at all.

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Yeah, occasionally. I saw him on a couple days ago, but didn't get to talk to him. we did quite a bit before Christmas. Send him a pm if you want something specific so he'll see it when he comes back. He's probably dancing or brush hogging trees again.

Sometimes those positive remarks are all you have to go on if something is good or well liked. I know it's hard to get technical replies to things and unless it's something really blatant I miss things like that.

Speaking of publishing.....

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i find if amazing that you wrote this, then you wrote a poem on your crotch. you are definitely a jack of all trades

oh and you dont like good feedback...ok, the story is horrible. write another one thats better (seriously man write another one) and post it!

Can I count you in my fanclub? I love you. Honestly. Now are you saying I should write another story or another poem about my crotch?

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lol no more crotch poems please tulvox

just another short story