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2005-10-26, 15:17
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Lulled by Serrated daggers.
Hi, here is a song I'm in the process of writing still. I still need to add three more verses to it so it can be complete. But here it is so far.
The rise of each new moon the eerie darkness
Mid October rain, the howling wolves
Blood drenched snow in gloomy woods
In the midst of lonely trees
I walk alone with constant fear
Of the gazing beasts of the night
Lusting to devour me greedily
Headlong I plunge, slowly torn apart
Slowly torn apart…
Unable to wake, vanished forever
Demons that lay upon my chest
That plague my dreams my souls raped
Screaming with fright neglected by angels
Snared inside the crystal ball that she grasps
Sadistic witch smiling paraphilia
Bleeding myself dry her erotic delight
Lifeless cold kisses, clutches of death
Steering a ship with an absence of sails
Scudding everlastingly before a gale
A sky of oppressed black clouds
Helpless to the fate of gloomy death
Sharp daggers that lull me by deception
Soothing the violent winds my sanctuary
Etching runes of stigmata
Crimson warm blood streaming heavily
Into a chalice savoring each drop
Never was the stream so transparent
Winds that clear my selfish sky
Winds that clear my selfish sky…
Don’t mourn for me, it is my decree
My dearest love come die with me
Last edited by Schizoid : 2005-10-26 at 21:09.
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2005-10-26, 20:24
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lol, what does lulled mean?? cuz in dutch lul is dick, so it would mean dicked in dutch 
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2005-10-26, 20:49
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 Wonderful!!!
Lulled is like when you're sort of drifting to sleep and you feel sort of unaware of anything around you.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-10-26, 21:07
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2005-10-26, 21:07
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I didn't mean dick by lulled! I meant lulled as to pacify and make calm  |
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2005-10-26, 21:16
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That was great anyways.
There was a lot of imagery in this piece, but to me not much of it related to the very last line which seemed to be the whole purpose of the piece. It was like there were parts of about 3 different songs in it. I think if I could see a common thread through it I'd like it more.
The first part reminded me of a piece that I'd read on metaltabs before. Maybe that's a more common theme and that's why.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-11-08, 20:49
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I am a tax on the world..
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I liked the intro the best, great.....
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
 
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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